All Comments on 'Eye of the Storm'

Great Read! Well done details and how the story developed without many actual points of conversation. Insights and

inner thoughts make it an exceptional job!! WELL DONE, Pet!!

Perhaps there ought to be a sequel? I think you could develop a good D/s relationship there. It seems like you have the skill to articulate that here.

Use of drugs to skip consent? With a few changes, this story could have really rocked. Try again, you write well enough to do richer characters. Leighlilly

please write another!!!! please keep this story going!

There was no good ending. It should taper off and preferably everyone lives happily ever after.

I think the thing i like best about this story is the fact that your vague about the different things he's doing to her whilst she's wearing the blindfold as she can't see. Makes it more believable and real. Very well written. You have a certain flair. Well done x

I loved this story, every bit of it. Thank you!

Wow! One of the best stories I've read in years :)

But, I have a few suggestions. First being an editor. While the story moves along pretty smoothly, there are several places you've skipped words. As a writer I know that happens when brains move faster than typing skills. Or the sentence is all jumbled. The reader know what you mean its just all discombobulated. Also the use of body over and over got tiresome. When you say "he ran his hands over her body, the curves of her hips and thighs" unless he ran his hands over all of her body, then her hips and thighs, you can just drop the body part. To say that her ran his hands over the curves of her hips and thighs, is cleaner. Just a personal opinion, you can take it or leave it. Otherwise great story, loved the plot and the little bit of non-consent. Keep writing!