All Comments on 'Falling in Love With My Sister Pt. 01'

Really good story I enjoyed reading. Eager for more of these two doing their thing.

Very nice story m like the surprise of them both being virgins. Can't wait for the next chapter!

YES!!!!!!! We need a part 2

The past tense of 'thrust' (I thrust it, he did thrust, it was thrust, it had been thrust)) is still 'thrust,' not 'thrusted.' The word is one of the odd ones. 'Thrusted' shows up as a misspelled word in this comment box.

Fun story otherwise.

Great work

awesome :)

A lovely story but you need to proofread. The errors were all silly little typos, double words or undeleted edits but there were quite a few.

I wouldn’t say you need an editor, but a careful re-read before posting chapter 2 would be beneficial.

And there better be a chapter 2!

Well written and well paced, thanks! 5/5

Great story, keep writing

Good story. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Great start! Keep it going!

The surprise at the end of the story, of the sibs both being virgins, made the story from 5 to beyond ratings, transcending the rating scale. It was tender, beautiful, honest and lovely. Thank you for the gift

A few grammar errors but nothing to get into a twist about. It was nice to read a story about a mature woman that has hair on her pussy, perfect description of it. Also nice brother came inside her where sperm belongs. A+ story.

A very basic story but exceptionally well told. If only parents knew it takes so little to stop their children fighting! Looking forward to the next chapter.

Fuck the proof reading police above - I came a gallon. Thank you.

It took me back to an almost exact same thing I had happen with an older girl cousin of mine almost 60 years ago. Sweetest memories.

Very good story, minor grammatical errors which can be easily edited but great writing! Thank you.

A little English Grammar correction, see as you like to slam the author, though “irregardless” is in the dictionary your usage here makes your statement a double-negative. Hence, “…irregardless of how much effort that they put into their workouts...”, makes one ponder: should it be “regardless of how much…”, your usage here is doublespeak and confuses the shit outta me. This method of criticism you used gives very little weight to the authors misspelling (?).

To the author: excellent premise - sarcastic older sister and her bullying makes the ending surprising. Minor errors in grammar or anatomy gives bullies fodder fir their own shirt commings

To Scottish Texan: I thought I was the only one who criticized grammar, diction and spelling, so I quit doing it. I liked your rather long comment. But your boat sank when you wrote "irregardless". Just drop the "ir" part, it's just "regardless".

Great story. Please continue.

Wow, do you need and editor!

That would not be for story construction, nor characterization, nor plot, nor eroticism, all of those were very good.

I look forward to your next entry in this series!

You pen name matches your writing ability. I enjoyed it immensely! CINCO ESTRELLAS!

please write more of this story

well done, i hope everything stay in between them without bringing other guys into it . Cuz that would ruin everything. 5/5

Thank you for all the comments. Some proofreading with go a long way :) Trying to get the story right but the details matter. Will improve with your input :)

Please write more it was every good!!

Man I wish that was my sister I was so harder reading this got to finish stroking my cock need release great story keep it up I will will to

Very, very good. Please continue.

Feet. toes, hairy! great (always sexy)! Don't ever do shaved pussy nonsense stories. Stubble, pimples, pus oozing infected hairs and chaffed razor burned skin -- that never works - author ratings are pitiful for stories like that. good job you got a 5 for a feet/toes and hairy pussy story! monster hair is best

This probably couldn't be any sexier! If you write more -- please do -- let them keep their sex exploration alive. Give Kevin just the beginnings of a little chest hair in the middle of his chest, and maybe a bit of hair on his abs. I assume a healthy dose of pubes, too!

Excellent, and it seems as it there is finally an author on this site who actually knows how to describe a sexy lady, "There was a small black satin bow at the top of her underwear, and short wisps of blonde HAIR peaking out all along the crease between her inner thigh and her panties. Please write more stories.

That as pretty hot...

Whew! One heck of a story. Well described/written.

Very good can't wait to see how this story goes.

Wow!

Very sweet.

FINALLY!! A story with a hairy pussy and small tits!!!!

Too many writers on this site do not understand, nor enjoy the beauty, sensitivity, and pleasure of smallish breasts.

AND adult pussies NEED a covering of fur [only trimmed to the thigh crease] to draw the eyes to the arrow pointing to paradise.

My two favorite porn stars are Jessie St. James, [who has the perfectly blonde tressed pussy and tits that are just hard nipples begging to be kissed and caressed], the other one is Veronica Hart { she will do anything sexual, AND looks like she is fully enjoying herself-- she acts like the pay is just a perk for having fun.]

Ok so they had sex was good but a little issue I have is you say there 18 and 20 with that being said nither there mom nor dad can tell them what to do basically they couldn't make them go on that trip with them they can't make them go to a theme park that is more for kids and they can't make them roast marshmallows with them nor can they make them share a room and bed but yet you wrote it out like there being made to do it so I find it hard to believe the brother and sister is really 18 and 20 it's almost like there under 18 the way it was wrote if they really are that age you need to have it where they tell there fucking parents no for a damn change make it at least a little realistic cause no 1 between 18 and 20 is going to let there parents make them do something they don't wanna do

Mfkndragon.

Dude what?

Brilliant introduction. It felt like the first time my wife and I had sex. That was over 50 years ago.

I wonder why their father placed them in that situation?

Love it. They behaved like 10-year-old children for a bit there with the bickering but I can overlook it as some silly sibling rivalry nonsense; you do tend to act like a child (even as 30-something adults, trust me on that) sometimes when arguing with a sibling. Story has potential. Hopefully it goes the distance.

I especially love that they were virgins; that adds something special to these stories in my opinion. No tarnishing their bodies with shitty experiences on douchebag boyfriends or cheating slut girlfriends (those are the typical scenarios I see, so I'm just calling it like I've read many times). They remain pure and only for each other, hopefully always. I think that's beautiful. Now, OK I admit, it's not the most plausible thing in the world that there's a 20-year-old bombshell that had a boyfriend and is still a virgin in college, but maybe she's just not as slutty as some other girls and actually wants to only sleep with someone that really cares for her and whom she really cares for, which seems to be the case. I really admire and respect women (well anyone really) that do that and don't just get drunk and "slut it up" just because, "hey college, let's go wild!"

Part 2 please

Great work, horniest siblings are my favs

Holy fuck, that was fucking hot!