All Comments on 'Family Affair'

This is a very good start hope you continue with it .

A GREAT start to (hopefully) a long and enjoyable story. Please don’t leave us hanging. Please continue with your story about Ryan, his mom and his aunt!

Love to see him knock up both his mother and his aunt. And perhaps the housekeeper would happen to be a sexy, young 20 year old that gets pulled into to fold and impregnated too. The four of them would make a nice little family, with the housekeeper appearing to be the son’s lover and “baby Momma” to the outside world. The sisters potentially could have been impregnated after being drugged and raped after wild night at a dance club, to maintain the true identity of their lover and babies’ father. Perhaps a final twist might involve adding the aunt’s secretary into the fold, and quickly knocking her up too... winding up with four hot women, a young stud, always unprotected sex, and many babies to cum.

If you don't know whether or not to continue your own story, don't.

Good, hot story...

When one paragraph ends with a quotation mark and the very next one starts with a mark, that indicates the character speaking has changed. When one character is speaking and is not uninterrupted by narrative or another character talking, every paragraph starts with a mark, but only the last one has a closing mark. You wrote the paragraphs of Sheryl telling Sharon what happened as conversation, not a monologue.

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If a paragraph doesn’t begin with a quotation mark, that indicates it’s narrative.

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Great read and played out well. Everyone is welcome to an opinion, but I don't see a need to knock up the mother and/or aunt or bring the maid into the mix. Very realistic that a MFF can be sustained.

This threesome is so fucking hot....looking forward to more.

Keep 'em coming. Cinco Estrellas!

I actually enjoyed it as a fantasy and taboo.