All Comments on 'Family Boundaries Ch. 03'

Okay, so sometimes I think that maybe you're trying too hard to write fancy verbiage and it backfires on because it comes out stilted and awkward. Take for instance:

"Then Cait had flirted with her, just a little bit, and all of a sudden Vi found herself incredibly distractable."

I think that you really should have stuck with the simplicity of "Vi found herself very distracted." It just reads easier and flows better. 😌

I liked Riker going down on Izzy, but you really should have let the girl cum from her brother's efforts without adding the vibrator into the mix. That kind of ruined the mood for me. 4/5

This is combinations of super sexy and super sweet. I love the twins together. The rest of the family are fun but nuts, but the stars are the twins. <3

Good stuff. But you are stringing it out a fair bit

5/5

I love your writing, very original and extremely sexy! String it out as much as you like, you have me hooked.

Thank you. You have a rare talent, and no editing needed.

it gets even more chaotic....brilliant

Oh, oh, oh...please, let ME comment!!!!

This is SSSSSSOOOOOO NASTY, I said it before, I'm saying it again...NASTY, NASTY, NASTY...

Now, all you have to do is get the rest of the family involved, make it a full and incestuous harem for Riker...all the sisters, and Mom thrown in for good measure.

Izzy and Riker gotta do the nasty act now...get it over with, and start spreading the love...AND I DO NOT CARE WHAT OTHERS SAY...INCEST **CAN** SHARE, AS IN THIS CASE...

FIVE**5**STARS, OH YES, 💥💥💥💥💥⚡⚡⚡⚡⚡🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥HOT, HOT, HOT!!!!!!

Great story. Love the multiple story lines.

This story line is fantastic. The twins are so damn cute and so fucking hot at the same time! Love it, 5 stars.

The very end of the story, the last words, "...the magic of those sexy runes sealed them together." nailed it for me. Took it into a different dimension, brought in a vast array of creative literary styles, subjects, and attractors (or attractor states, if you prefer), out of nowhere, beautifully. The sex was fun too of course, but this was an unexpected, not unpleasant, knock on the head.