All Comments on 'Family Issues Ch. 12'

5/5

Prison was over done with the sex cell. Nothing sexy about it.nadine really he goes rich back to her??? Glad to see kevins finally come round an glad to see his dad finally.an Roy was an interesting twist ill be glad for the finale

Great story. Keep up the good work and never mind the haters.

5* A great new chapter! Can't wait for the finale!

I'm sorry that you had some mean or hateful comments on your previous chapter(s). I know I left my critique, and reading it back it sounded more harsh that it should have. But I feel you really brought this back in a good way for the characters. Helen's atill the resrved badass, Kevin's not stupid/drunk anymore (mostly), and Nadine is as terrible as ever with her manipulation. Can't wait to see how you resolve this story!

Please please pleeeease don't make us wait so long for the next chapter. I really need to know how it ends.

This story has grown on me and I really cant wait to read the last chapter . Thank you for a very interesting time x

I'm all fired up and ready for the next chapter. But I'm still wondering how she drove all the way from the hotel to the office without being seen on one single security camera anywhere. Has to be the DA or FBI withholding evidence. No other way for that to happen. Maybe we'll find out in the last chapter.

Sad to know next chapter is the last one. Real romance in this niche is hard to find especially as high of quality as your story. Hope you have something else in store for us after the final chapter and thank you for your hard work.

Love the story has me gripped every time, just wish I didn’t have to wait so long, to read the next chapter! I like the twist , feeling a bit sorry for poor Kev though lol x

I don't want to repeat any comments, but damn, great job! While I'd like stories to be uploaded everyday, I know quality writing takes time.

In the meantime, I'll just imagine what comes next... 8)

You are simply an amazing writer.

noooo not the last chapter coming up . i love this story - and always looking to read more . thanks for this chapter .

This is one of the best stories I have read in Literotica. The character build up is amazing. Please update the next chapter fast. Can't wait one month to read the next update. . .

Its ending

Please save Helen her and Kevin belong together.

Damn this is good I check almost daily for this fucked up shit. Came for the smut stayed for the story. 5 stars 10/10 would read again

I think you got complaints on the last chapter not based on your writing but based on the story line. Weather you intended or not a lot of readers fell into the trap of loving and being very sympathetic for Helen and even Kevin. They want the happy ever after ending and they hate all other characters that would do them harm. It's your story. Thanks for entertaining us!!!!

Look, you take the futanari aspect out of the storyline, and what have you got? This is a prime time soap opera. The sex, the drugs, the murder, the love, the compassion, the hatred, the vile bigotry, the twists, the turns, the depth of the characters, the moral ambiguities, the well-defined lines being drawn, crossed, and drawn again... this is Dallas. This is Dynasty. This is Soap without the comedy. This is damn good writing, and it's a compelling story, which is exactly why people keep coming back even though they think it's a horrible storyline.

Keep up the good work.

For my money, the best story I have read on Lit, though there are many I have yet to read.

Dont get your ego all inflated, though, there is still time to eff it up...;-)

Awaiting chapter 13 wrap up. Can't wait to see how you're going to wrap this story up in one chapter without leaving loose ends. Helen needs to be exonerated: she & Kevin need to marry with Kevin impregnating she & Diana. Nadine & Iman should remain friends with Kevin & Helen. Syndicate needs to be exposed to public scrutiny as well as their enablers. To this point this is one of the 5 best stories I've read on Lit. Can't imagine how you can conclude this story in 1 final chapter

but please hurry my butt is getting sore from sitting on the seat's edge.

I hope you write more stories that are this engaging!

look no jokes...this is the best series online i have read ever. But you're stretching it too long now. If chapter 13 is the last chapter I suppose it will be the longest as well. You're a good writer. now wrap it up please.

wow, fuck these recent comments. I want to read the story you set out to write, no matter how many chapters it spans or where the plot goes. please don't get discouraged by commenters with stunted attention spans. you rock, allthatisfuta :)

Wow. I was looking for a erotic Story but i find one of the best romances that i have read in some time

I wouldn't say I completely loved the story so far, but it certainly has been worth reading. I like almost all the characters you have introduced and am very interested to see how this ends. Some commenters seem to have given you a wish list, but I don't care about any of that and would rather see where you decide to take it.

That said Kevin does need to get DPed by Nadine and Helen before the saga ends.

Just kidding.. you just keep writing how you're writing.

I think your main problems here stem from your commitment to rape fantasies. First, there's your audience. Women have, by far, the vast majority of rape fantasies. It's not really a typical male fascination. I can't speak for homosexual male fantasies, but homosexual males aren't generally attracted to transwomen at all. Crossdressing is a sexual fetish that does not include a person's sexual preference in gender or actions. Even if transvestites have a large proportion of rape fantasies (another idea I am unqualified to address), you only present the Asian twins; not the protagonist who is involved in almost every sex scene. Secondly, because you seemed to want to present extensive and perpetual rape scenarios, you made your story centered around futanari. You go so far as to address the bigotry towards transwomen in your story; but absent any representation, the futas are the stand-ins for transwomen. Needless to say, you don't paint a very pretty picture. I thought that giving your futas having Adam's apples was especially distasteful. Third, with little else to offer, you imply that the vast majority of sex for transwomen is rape or non-consensual, transwomen are only interested in men, and that transwomen are overwhelmingly dominant. As if the negative characterizations weren't bad enough, you shoehorn sex into your chapters. Introducing characters for sexual tension (which invariably plays out one way or another) and variety (which is woefully limited) hurts your writing and this story. Finally, there is a vast difference between rape and submissive fantasies. You present this general idea with Sin's explanations of dominance and BDSM, as well as her behavior and internal monologue. I thought that was done well (although she horrifically violates the trust), but you've already driven away portions of your audience who are interested in story/romance and are rape-averse. I think your last few chapters are more plot-driven and your sexual scenarios are less offensive, but you've turned off a lot of people who aren't around anymore to read your work.

As an aside, there is also a significant difference between a sexual fantasy and a sexual assault.

Sorry, I know this is somewhat uncharitable, but I really feel like this story has lost it's roots altogether. I understand it's very difficult to conclude a fantasy/erotica story such as this, but where I find fault is that the original theme of the story, namely, futanari erotica with a heavy emphasis on romance and character development, has evolved into something that is less futa than drama, and less erotica than crime. The fact that I seriously wanted to see a detailed Kevin and Nadine scene was telling; if only to see fat futa cocks being used the way "God intended". I was all for the slowly building romance in the start, but the wick is burnt, and I'm just not getting the futa stimulation I came around for.

Still one of the best *stories* in the futa realm that I've ever read, but I do hope the author brings it back to where it all began.

Wasn’t my favorite chapter but Kevin and Helen need to get back together, he should know Nadine is lying to him. Also he hasn’t tried to talk to Diana at all. Seems weird. Good plot though, can’t wait to read more.

I'm feeling very invested in this story at this point, so keep going!

To me it's still a great. I do believe that Kevin and Helen should be together forever in the end and her sister should be happy as well. But I would like to see Iman find out what her sister did and expose her to Kevin with the proof to show just how smart she really is. But I'm truly going to hate not being able to read this great story when you bring it to its conclusion. Great work please keep going. Thank you

While I know the take over was seeded early on, it has still been one of the weakest parts of the story in execution. My lack of interest in Nadine and how much the sudden murder frame job felt unnecessary meant I skipped basically everything in this chapter that wasn’t a courtroom scene or Helen talking to her lawyer. This chapter could have just been the trial without the added sex and prison drama and would have been tolerable, as it is I can barely justify the one star I gave it.

I’m this deep now from being hooked on that strong start in the early chapters so I’m going to see how this all goes but really I’m just along for the ride at this point and wanting to see an actual ending is all that brings me back.

I’ve enjoyed this chapter or, should I say, I’ve enjoyed this chapter as, on the whole, I’ve enjoyed the previous chapters. The basic story is good, although a little too tangled, and the sex is there for those who want it. It’s just food for the handy and although descriptive, and initially interesting, the basic repetiveness has made it lose its flavour. But as a story it deserves its ratings.

It would have been a much better story if 25% of the text had been edited out. There’s a substantial amount of padding and the pen giving priority to using all the ink rather than what it actually writes. You have been on my favourite authors list for some time and when it popped up that your next chapter was available I read it immediately. It’s been over a month this time before I got round to reading this chapter. You’re not the only writer that has put quantity before quality.

However I look forward to the final chapter and, hopefully, a blockbuster ending with the fireworks to go with it.

Great chapter, though I'm a little sad the series is drawing to a close. I was hoping for a Iman/Nadine/Kevin threesome but it looks like Kevin will be too busy saving Helen for that to happen. I hope you continue to write more futa stories in the future.

Don't make this into a Futa Hallmark ending. Please deal with this a little more like real life. Leave some ends loose; you might want to do a sequel....

Man... I've honestly skipped over most of the sex scenes since chapter 3... I'm having too many feels from. Please let Kevin and Helen just be happy

Loving this story hope the last chapter arrives very soon.

since the last chapter at the end of which you promised a final chapter. Almost six weeks have gone by with your readers waiting to see the end of this story. Does the Valkyrie end up with the hero? I think that most of your readers hope so. Looking forward to the ending of the story. Thanks!

It was the longest so far so it took some time to finish.

The editor is a volunteer so it's not my place to rush him.

So probably 2-3 weeks from now,

Your writing is brilliant. I don't even prefer the topic but you make your characters come alive like nothing else I've read on this site. Well done. You have invested us so deeply into Kevin and Helen that is going to be very hard to end this story... I hope you're up to the task :)

Thought the sex with Aziz and the other inmates was really unnecessary. Just scrolled past it.

A lot of what you write about is true. Oh of course your vision of the all powerful futnari is bullshit thank God. But the sick, bitter and twisted nature of so many people is unfortunately too true. They say the eyes are the "Windows to the Soul", I'm of the opinion that writers open their souls when they put thoughts to paper. Inner Demons escape. Well you see I'm in my 60's. Serving, then working Security at "Private Functions" and hard living & motorcycles and trying very hard to kill myself for the things I'd seen and ALLOWED to happen after once swearing an Oath to protect the Young & the Innocent. Well it TORE me in half.

I think you focus on the sick, bitter & twisted too much unless your writing is an expiation of guilt - then its very dangerous. FAR too much rape unless that is YOUR vision of Futa-kind. Rape is not about sex or lust...it is a Sick Crime of Violence and Hate. Please think VERY carefully about what your readers view and how you might influence THEM.

YOU are wasting some serious talent just for the gratification and adulation of a few people like yourself. Narcissism at its finest. Enjoy yourself!

Your story made me cry 5 times so far. 3 times alone in this chapter.

It simply beautiful. The combination of a great plot, futadom, loveable characters and great dialogue makes this one of the best stories I have ever read.

12 chapters in one go! That is only the second time that a story/book made me read it in one go.

Seriously, please write more!

The prison sex made this chapter somewhat of a chore at times.

Oh, man. It's like you tried to find the one thing that could make this terrible turn in the story even worse: courtroom melodrama. When the judge said, "tread carefully, counselor" it was all I could do not to throw my hands up and just walk away from my laptop. That line doesn't even get used as a joke anymore its so damn corny. Sadly that was indicative of how every scene in court went. Not even Sam Waterston could have made that enjoyable.

And what in the sweet name of Christ was up with that 'photo shoot?' Why the hell am I reading about this nonsense this late in the story? Maybe if things weren't getting dragged out so much the writing wouldn't be suffering so badly right here at the end when it should be at its strongest. Instead I'm reading about some guy getting fisted against his will...WHY?

But far, far worse than any of that is what you did to Kev. Kevin would be sleeping on the damn courthouse steps, not living with Nadine. And he damn sure wouldn't be having sex with someone else while the love of his life is on trial for murder. The only thing that I remotely enjoyed about this chapter was Kev spending more time with Iman, but you even spoiled that. It wouldn't take Iman -or anyone else for that matter- pointing out to him that he still loves Helen. I don't know why he's getting all high and mighty about his futa girlfriend in the last scene when five minutes before that he was talking about trying to put her behind him. I can't believe you did it, but you actually made me dislike Kevin.

I really, really should have stopped after chapter nine. The only thing that would have been lost is the resolution to a subplot I never cared about and the chance to see Diana made to suffer(which I'm starting to doubt is ever gonna happen anyway).

Yeah...it bothers me a little how soon Kevin believed that she was cheating. Really bothers me how he’s still sleeping with Nadine too. I really hope things get better. Only one chapter to go.

This story was so good up until now. It really feels like your trying your hardest to make me not want to read this story, to just set it down and walk away. Sure good stories have highs and lows but goddamn I still want to be able to enjoy the story when it's in at a low point. The prison sex was a huge turn off. Honestly if not for Kev trying to push some character development between Nadine and her sister I would have skipped this chapter entirely.

I got my rocks off in the first chapter and continued reading because I was so invested in the characters. Even when Diane was at her worst there were still moments that made you enjoy the story in some way. But I had to force myself through this last bit. If there isn't a good enough payoff at the end this will be a HUGE dissapointment and waste of time.

I'll admit, I totally skimmed the prison sex; it was hard to read and didn't turn me on. Helen is seemingly adrift in a sea of negative emotion, isolated from her Kevin. A mystery is unfolding that has multiple layers to it and with everyone scattered, this chapter felt like Empire Strikes Back. I wonder what you'll come up with for Return of the Jedi ;)

There is nothing wrong with this chapter - I obviously disagree with some of the comments posted. This is my second read of the best story on Literotica and it's still head and shoulders above the rest. I really wish you'd write more stories period. You do great work please keep it up.

Ooof! Everything rides on a wet-behind-the-ears lawyer and... Nadine loving Kevin enough to set him free?

Damn. I'm into the last chapter..... I started when it first came out but the chapters were taking way too long to come out and I finally came back around to reading it

I've seen some of the criticism from previous chapters about not caring about sex that isn't between Helen and Kevin, or that other characters plot points/ feelings aren't worth exploring and I think they're bad takes. At the end of the day this is a Literotica story and (even though I'm sure most people this far are invested in the story) the point is still to have sexual encounters/scenes throughout it. By having different characters with different personalities and motivations the author has the liberty to expand the kinks/ dynamics of the sex throughout the story without making the main characters unbelievable.

It's also important to remember that people were saying the story should focus less on other characters like Nadine, but now we see why that expansion was so important, since she's back to being an integral player.

I loved seeing Kevin talk to his father, it reminds me of my dad in a lot of ways. Overall, I've never been more impressed with a Literotica story and this plot is honestly better than many real shows/books. Thank you to the author, fuck the haters (other than the big bird haters haha) and keep doing what you're doing. Super proud of a person I've never even met cause the stories that good.

I can't put this down. It's really just such an amazing ride. These past couple chapters haven't been quite as enjoyable though, due to how low things have gotten, but it's kind of inevitable. I miss Kevin and Helen, and their pure love for one another, and I really hope the "Helen is a cheater" lie serves a narrative purpose, because Kevin thinking that of her doesn't seem to add anything right now. I also really didn't like that Kevin is having sex with Nadine while Helen sits in prison. It just doesn't seem like something he would do. But that's the extent of my criticisms. The sex at this point doesn't interest me at all, but I understand why it's there. I can't wait to find out how this all ends.

Agree with the anonymous that said his concerns about loose ends. Hard to do a total closure in a single chapter(that's the worst about Brazilian tv novels, all thrown in the last chapter without transitions),but I believe in you. I expect when I jump to the next chapter to have a great reading. And here we are, to the final step. See you there

Nice

These chapters are tooooooooo good. I should be getting sleep, but I have to finish now! I have stayed up late into the night to finish a few books, of the many i have read, but never a story online. Thank you for such a real reading experience! :)

Honestly, as much as I enjoy this story and your writing, I think this whole chapter was a waste. We don't care about the other prisoners, the sex is rather commonplace by now, and I think the whole murder and courtroom drama is a farce.

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I can't believe the FBI would have been so inept as to not discover what was truly happening, or that a woman as wealthy as Helen would be stuck with using a wet-behind-the-ears pubic defender, accounts frozen or not.

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I found this chapter to be more annoying than anything else. So much continual doom and gloom, along with the ridiculously one-sided "trial", forced me into having to decide whether or not I wanted to torture myself by reading more.

Much as I try to avoid my lawyer hat when reading fiction, sometimes the liberties authors take with the law are too much. A few things: First , no death penalty in California (nice try with the”special circumstance,” though). Second, courts won’t freeze a defendant’s assets so he can’t pay for a lawyer. Little sixth amendment problem there, but who’s paying attention at this point? So, wrap it up already, will

Ya?