All Comments on 'Family Love Pt. 01: Revelation'

Loved it. Story was great. Some grammatical errors. But other wise please continue with the story.

it's definitely hot hoping to get a dad-gf scene continue soon!

Great, touched every sensitive nerve for me.

more please

Boring.

More Please!

Loved it, my only suggestion is for you to get an editor, can't wait for the next part.

Yes. Very hot story. Please continue 👍👍

For me, one of the best story content. Can’t wait for more.

It was going so well till you had to shove the dad/son stuff in it. Completely ruined the experience for me.

Please update the tags if this story is going to have male/male stuff in it.

sigh

It looks to me English is not your first language. I like the plot of the story, but the 'broken' English was a struggle at times. If you continue, try to find a native English speaker to help edit. I wanted to give 5 stars for the story, but with all the struggles I could only give 4. I hope you continue and get the help you need to improve. Thanks for Sharing!

I loved the story but was shocked by the male to male crap. I hope there will not be any more in the next chapter.

I can tell that you're likely not a native English speaker. It's a shame you didn't get an English speaker to help you edit this story. I couldn't even get passed page 2. Sorry, my friend. :(