All Comments on 'Fang of Control Ch. 06'

Great story line but it is too rushed. use your imagination more and make it better.

It's like the whole story is on fast forward.

I think people say many of my stories seem rushed because I actually am in a hurry most of the time. If I only have time to write 3 pages a week I don't want to spend most of it describing furniture, clothing, long conversations, etc. If you don't care for the style, there are plenty of other writers out there.