All Comments on 'Fantasy Fulfilled'

There is nothing wrong with fantasy, but it's better if it is faintly believable.

You see to have thrown every cliché possible into this overwritten piece.

And your dialogue is very unnatural. People don't talk like that. When writing dialogue, read it out loud and ask yourself if you ever heard anyone talk that way.

Thanks. That was great to picture that happening and everyone ended up satisfied!

is a moron.