All Comments on 'Fantasy Pt. 08: Alice's Failure'

Unfortunately, we do have these things called "neural pathways". We find silly, illogical comfort in repeating the same choices we have made before, even when the result was painful. Whenever we are faced with a decision, it takes a certain bravery to be willing to choose an alternative pathway.

Even civilized and free-thinking people can be conditioned into this, as we are seeing all the time.

So even while I find much of your story believable, I don't find it erotic. Or dramatic. Or educational.

We seem to be dragging on endlessly for no payoff. And it's not even a classic tale of bondage. It's just...vulgar and hopeless.

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Do you foresee anything interesting happening soon? Could you maybe do some foreshadowing?

Confession: I’ve been waiting for a final outcome before commenting, but I must interject, or more appropriately, confess, that as much as I’m revolted by the sordid details of Alice’s ‘fall’, still I’m drawn to this story like a moth to a flame, or perhaps like a gawker to the carnage of a roadside accident with the bodies still warm. Like the bukkake videos I’ve cringingly and guiltily sat through without averting my gaze. Touché! Point well made. And yes I’ll continue to read. BTW, as with your other works, I quite enjoy your writing style. Thanks for your continued submissions.

I'm out. Correct me if I'm wrong but skimming the other works by the author there isn't a single story where they separate at the end. I don't see that changing here.

Reconciliation is really difficult to write a story that feels like things have been resolved. And if you know that this will be the case then it's sort of starting to watch a new tv series that you know will be canceled on a cliffhanger.

It's difficult but not impossible. Especially if the betrayal is something like a drunken one night stand. But here the ante just keeps getting upped to no end. Just the previous story we learn she would drink the dudes piss. A hole had been dug and the hole digging engineers had to order some dynamite for the bedrock just so they can keep digging deeper. We're so far beyond the point of no return I just don't see any way back.

Till now this serie is getting worse readers evaluation for every new part, and since this is common for almost 90% of the new tales in this category (and only this one), the question is why ? It's not a matter of the authors writing style, so, it must be the content. It appears evident that some kind of content is very much disliked in this category and is doomed to a really bad evaluation.

What actually happened during this chapter? Nothing! Absolutely nothing. Just more waffle from a man who is indecisive, weak, plus so stupid he couldn't plan anything successfully. He still, even now, is allowing different people to manipulate him... and still doesn't realise that it's because he lacks the ability to take charge. He seems to be waiting for, well anything to happen, without being proactive himself.

Really hope that this foreshadowed Alice's mistake will result in admitting her to mental institution.

So...??? The story did not move forward in this chapter.

Zzzzzzzz.....

I'm still with you, but getting a bit bored. This could all fizzle out into nothing; or, Alice could commit suicide; or they could reconcile, or...

It would be nice to hear that Richard gets his comeuppance - don't mind how, don't mind who - just some poetic justice.

CLIFFHANGER! Awwww no....

If you are wise u will end this boring story soon there is only so long Alice can go without fucking Henery

Getting somewhere finally.

Could have skipped this chapter and not missed much. As always, Alice is a portrait of self destruction. The last sentence only solidifying the assertion. Henry could not be better named. He personifies the milk toast demeanor of a cliche 1940s movie character. I can almost hear him: "Se...see here n...n...now Richard! You...you're going t..t..to far! Taking lib...liberties with m...m...my wife!" And Richard, he will continue to be the predator that he is. Destroying lives and leaving tears in his wake. Someone should make him have a truly horrible accident.

If this serie keep going down so much in ratings, next parts will quickly reach the bottom at 1*. From the very negative numbers this tales are getting worse for every new part, now at a mere 2.6*. After 8 constantly descending parts, it's obvious that this plot need a good change in content and direction.

So strange [no not really] that the attention span of LW readers is so low. I wonder if the vast majority have ever read a book, more than 120 pages cover to cover. Five golden ones.