by zachattack163
The dialogue could hardly be more fake, trite, or just plastic sounding. Just a hint of human realism added to it could have made this like 300% more interesting.
Give that sexy young man Jesse a splash of dark hair for that sexy chest and abs -- and let's get them together inside the barn for a blow job and sexy romp in the hayloft. I imagine a good size cock is hidden under his work jeans! You've got a good story that needs to continue your love!
To the second anonymous person who commented here I think you are going to be quite happy with the second chapter I have planned for this story ;)