All Comments on 'Fate Determined'

Let me see if I have this straight. Steve's girlfriend is caused to drive into the canal, where she drowns. But Steve did nothing to attempt to save her. Instead, he kidnaps the woman driving the other car and takes her to his house as a slave/captive.

And THAT was the good part! From that point forward, the story makes less and less sense.

love the premise even with the plot hole mentioned above, but where's the action? I'm sure you're planning future installments but I'm not a fan of chapterized stories, especially when there's nothing to jerk off to. hopefully you'll make it up to your readers in chapter 2.

I'll definitely stick with my day job, but the GF loves it and most excellently spiced up the bedroom,bathroom and well the whole house. Any ideas, good and bad, well needed.