All Comments on 'Feeling Neighborly'

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Great first chapter! Fun, intense and sensual. You captured Olivia's desire and fascination so well. I liked how she finds the idea of her neighbor knowing she watches him titillating. Kendra is a fun character. She plays off Olivia well. LOL at her text message: "Thanks for having us around Sis. Love you lots!! BTW... you should totally hook up with the guy next door. He's totally into you - I can tell. DTF. Get soooome! It's about damn time you lose that V-card!"

Olivia flirting with Jared was both cute and awkward. Great job of describing him: " He wasn't much as muscular as he was jacked - swole even, with bulging pecs and biceps. He bore a scar on his right forearm, just below the elbow - a deep cut that had healed over time. It was perhaps his only imperfection, though annoyingly it somehow added to his rugged beauty." I liked how she needed a drink immediately afterward. Olivia masturbating to porn, slowly growing more and more aroused while searching for thr right one, and then imagining it was her in place of the woman in the video; that was so hot! This part really turned me on: "Olivia was naked, her legs spread apart... her hands between her legs as they rubbed and plucked at her loins... desperate for that golden release... eager to match that euphoria that the bimbo was experiencing. The one that looked like her. How quickly she'd trade places with her - the way she felt, at a word she'd be in her place, on her hands and knees, rocked from behind by the muscular stud. Rocked into endless pleasure.

Their forms danced and merged- again and again.

She rubbed and plucked, her liquids dripping and sweltering between her legs.

She moaned. The sight of herself merged with the sight of the black lover...

And she soon fell asleep - the restless slumber of someone in an anxious state. Full of lucid dreams and half-luminal desires."

And LOL at: "It felt weird-masturbating alone in her dad's old bed." And at Olivia punching "empty spot in her bed" earlier.

Keep up the great work. You are very talented and creative. Looking forward to reading more!

Great first chapter! Fun, intense and sensual. You captured Olivia's desire and fascination so well. I liked how she finds the idea of her neighbor knowing she watches him titillating. Kendra is a fun character. She plays off Olivia well. LOL at her text message: "Thanks for having us around Sis. Love you lots!! BTW... you should totally hook up with the guy next door. He's totally into you - I can tell. DTF. Get soooome! It's about damn time you lose that V-card!"

Olivia flirting with Jared was both cute and awkward. Great job of describing him: " He wasn't much as muscular as he was jacked - swole even, with bulging pecs and biceps. He bore a scar on his right forearm, just below the elbow - a deep cut that had healed over time. It was perhaps his only imperfection, though annoyingly it somehow added to his rugged beauty." I liked how she needed a drink immediately afterward. Olivia masturbating to porn, slowly growing more and more aroused while searching for thr right one, and then imagining it was her in place of the woman in the video; that was so hot! This part really turned me on: "Olivia was naked, her legs spread apart... her hands between her legs as they rubbed and plucked at her loins... desperate for that golden release... eager to match that euphoria that the bimbo was experiencing. The one that looked like her. How quickly she'd trade places with her - the way she felt, at a word she'd be in her place, on her hands and knees, rocked from behind by the muscular stud. Rocked into endless pleasure.

Their forms danced and merged- again and again.

She rubbed and plucked, her liquids dripping and sweltering between her legs.

She moaned. The sight of herself merged with the sight of the black lover...

And she soon fell asleep - the restless slumber of someone in an anxious state. Full of lucid dreams and half-luminal desires."

And LOL at: "It felt weird-masturbating alone in her dad's old bed." And at Olivia punching "empty spot in her bed" earlier.

Keep up the great work. You are very talented and creative. Looking forward to reading more!

Chapter 2

You're moving the story along nicely. I liked how you included the changing of seasons. This part was pretty hot: "At night, Olivia tossed and turned while feverish images of herself and Jared played out in her mind, blurring in and out of her constant sleep-wake cycle, while sultry videos played out on her laptop screen.

Usually, she felt her most fiery, passionate horny after she had spoken to him. Like when he had just finished jogging. She had walked down to pick up a package that had been left at front of her driveway, near the road. He offered to help carry the package in, but she politely declined, showing off some strength of her own as she picked up the box."

The power of lust. LOL at Jared seeing her black dildo. I also really liked the backstory with Olivia's planned Caribbean vacation, and her fantasizing about making love to a black man on the beach. It was very sensual and intense! This part was beautiful: "Would she be ready for it? She’d waited long enough. Her dark companion wouldn’t care about her inexperience… he’d guide her down the path, easing her through her fear. On the white sands, the rolling waves behind them, he’d take her. She’d cry out in anguish as she’d feel him between her legs, releasing her from her burden - and then let the sweet pleasure wash over her body.

Olivia pressed her chest against the window, feeling the cool against her hot sticky, skin. Her other hand had slipped down the front of her bottoms."

And Olivia's first encounter with Jared was steamy! This made me so hard: "She felt the bulging muscle in his underwear as his crotch rubbed her inner thigh, his slacks having slipped off below his hips. Underneath her shorts, she still wore panties, but she knew that these clothes would not stand as a barrier to the forces of lust that compelled them.

"I'm... sooo... wet," she whispered, writhing with newly evolved wantonness. She was indeed - her fingers slid easily into her slit. No... not her fingers. His. Her shorts had slipped off easily and her undergarment had been pushed to the side to allow his roaming hand to fondle her private parts. He hadn't stated his intentions - his mouth was too busy suckling and teething on her nipple - but it was doubtful she'd have refused him.

"May I?" She heard him speak again. He had slid down to his knees, having stripped off her panties along the way, having lavished her belly with kisses as he descended to her womanhood. He looked up at her with searching eyes - willing her to give him the word.

"Yes," she uttered the affirmation and then gasped as the sweet, golden sensation of his tongue flicking across the beaming folds of her slit, up towards her clit. The firm, writhing appendage - slick with spit and devious in its tact, flaked across her nub, making it hum with pleasure. His face pressed between her thighs - his mouth lowered, his tongue finding her opening - first kissing her womanly lips before his tongue thrust into her virginal opening.

"Ohh - myyyy - fuuuuck," she sighed as she felt him eat her out. He was eating her pussy. Flashes of images centred in her vision - his broad back slick with sweat after a heavy workout now between her legs, his muscles tensing and pulling as his head pressed against her opening. Feeling his lips suckle on her flower, his tongue pressed and pressed till she could see spots of golden shimmer in her vision."

All that passion finally erupting! Keep up the great work. Looking forward to reading the finale.

Very hot and intense! My favorite part was: ""Oh - please Jared! Fuck... me! Fuck me! Take my virginity! Fuck my pussy! I... don't know why I haven't said it yet - I should have asked for this sooner. Fuck me now! Take me... and fuck me! Please Jared!"

He stared at her, his expression unchanged as he slowly shifted forward and she felt the thick, hard tip push against her opening.

Gasping, she felt his bulky masthead push past that initial breach - which had stood intact for far too long - and slide into her deeply. It felt as though he had pushed the air out of her lungs, her gasp was formless until she cried out.

Slowly he began to rock back and forth. And before she could encourage him more, he leaned in and pressed his lips to hers.

For a moment, all she could see is the ceiling... but when she closed her eyes again, she pulled herself deeper into the feeling. Into his feeling - the deep, raw feeling of his cock pushing into her. When she opened her eyes, she could see his face again. His rugged, beautiful face - frowning as he endured her tightness. She'd never been fucked before, and his scowl registered her virginal grip.

"Oh... it's sooo good," she moaned, feeling his girth stretching her walls as his big, bold shaft slid back and forth, deflowering her.

She could feel herself getting wetter with each stroke that now confidently sawed through her, his hips crashing into hers, opening her deeper to the infinite pleasure that she so desperately needed. A whole new world waited for her.

"Why didn't you come to me sooner, Liv?" he asked, his hot breath on her skin. His words sounded distant even as he whispered it in her ear. "I wanted you... I wanted you so badly...""

The fact it was all a dream went a long way of conveying Olive's frustration, but also the strength of her desire. Somehow, it makes the story even hotter: the fantasies, longing, anticipation... Also, great job fireshadowing that their lovemaking was just a dream. With Olivia thinking it feels too good to be true, and her first thinking "her fingers", then "his fingers". And by mentioning her having lucid dreams earlier.

Keep up the great work. Thank you so much for writing this. I will definitely read your other stories!