All Comments on 'Finally She Gave It to Me'

Good premise.

Buth the sex -- including the anal -- is just blah. It's written like an essay, not erotica.

Three stars.

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Keep at your writing. Spend time on details. Think about exactly how it feels to have your cock in a woman. Stretch that into the story. Find someone to help you edit so your reader isn't distracted by trivial spellerrors. And get in your characters heads. Read lots of the best stuff on this site. You have a really dirty mind, which is the first prerequisite. Now the practice...