Finding Home Pt. 19

I'll have to side with several other commenters, the plot point that she would make out in front of all of Andy's family and friends just isn't believable. I know you can do better, so I'll dock you one for laziness. Likewise, Andy's quick forgiveness, when taken in the context they've only known each other a few weeks, is an example of artistic laziness. 4*

The fact that everyone forgave her that same day, after the kiss IN FRONT of everyone was beyond disappointing. There was groundwork for some intense drama which wouldve added so much to this story. All-in-all, just re-affirms that Eden shouldve been the choice.

I think my real problem with this chapter is how quick he was to forgive her. To me, the kind of hurt you feel when someone you love betrays you like that doesn't just go away so easily. It's also the fact that she didn't really have to fight to win him back and earn his forgiveness. I'd like to have read her realizing her mistake and being the one to fix things. Honestly, most of the fallout happens with her asleep and she gets to wake up to him already forgiven her.

Although to be honest the cheating came out of nowhere and didn't really fit the story at all. Maybe a different plotline could have been used to induce drama?

Maybe this is the best uncertain conclusion to a cinderfella fantasy. It was an entertaining ride for a restored white knight and damsels in distress. Not really realistic as struggle for money was never an obstacle to a better life. Feels incomplete, though...

Have been patiently waiting for the next chapter . You were posting new ones every two to three weeks even on your several chapter's at one time have you given into some bad criticism and diceded to stop the series . I hope not the last chapter was out there but is recoverable would like to see more soon a fan .

This had been a very enjoyable series until this part. This is the first part that I gave anything less than five stars, and the stars I did give it were based more on the good writing than the content. In some ways, it's nice to see an author introduce some real-world elements to remind readers that not everything comes up roses, but in escapism literature, such as this, this part was a real buzz kill. The disrespect shown to Andy by Sara doesn't seem to fit with the theme of the story and makes it difficult to care much about Sara anymore. I also question Andy's willingness to forgive so quickly. If there is to be anymore to this series, I'll probably give it another chance, but any similar story lines among any of the characters would most likely end my interest in the series. Thanks for the effort in writing this story.

Where is the next chapter … we need to keep moving on.

Took an awesome story that I have been reading nonstop,,, to a messed up last chapter,,,first of all a marine sniper would go the F,(;& off big time for the embarrassment of the family. Then her screw up in front of family and friends was a major slap in the face. An with what he went through with his other girlfriends prior to this last chapter with her by his side,,,, then she did that ,,, major set back and then the OG’s forgave her ,,, that would not happen in the real world of there position,,, that fast ,,, I am wondering if deep down Sara isn’t actually a gold digger after finding out about Andy and his money ,,,

Eden should have been the one ,,, I don’t think she would have done that to Andy based on the story build up and the connection

Went from a 5++ story to a 2 star story in one chapter

Saddddd

Another one I wont be bothering with. This belongs in Loving wives with all the other crap.

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