by Meridian13
...is she marrying Ken? I mean, really, it makes no sense. She has no ambivalence, she provides no reasoning for doing it, nothing to counter the bad things. It makes her look a bit stupid.
I love this story, and I always get to the end wanting to know more! Meridian's relationship with Ken Doll is realistic. Not every engaged couple makes it to marriage, and things like this usually happen within the last month or two before the wedding. I am curious as to what exactly Meridian is. I mean... she's a rock star AND working as a secretary... and she's packing some serious heat along with having a little sixth sense? To be honest... I wouldn't care if you made her a being from an alternate dimension, I would still read this story and wait anxiously for each new chapter.
I'M LIKE A JUNKIE WAITING FOR MY NEXT FIX READING THIS STORY. OOOOOH, THE ANTICIPATION OF THE NEXT CHAPTER. Please don't leave me this way.
No criticism for the plot or characters so far, they're great, but you could use a little more proofreading and some more commas to make sentences flow a little better. Again, the story is great!
...as others have said, it would really benefit from some editing. There are great editors on this site. And I do kind of wonder what she saw in Ken initially, if he's such a jerk now! :)
is there going to be a point to this story soon because thats all that is keeping me reading that and the laughs