by ioan1234
The one thing a domme can never be is uninterested. Lost interest on page 1. Dominant and snotty are not synonyms.
Thank you all for the feedback. I believe all people can be different. And that is something I wanted to bring to this story. (I also didn't want these characters to be the same as the ones from "Please Let Me Serve You") There are all kinds of people out there. Some may be quite expressive and emotional, and some may be cold as nitroglycerin. But, maybe there is more than meets the eye. If we give ourselves a chance to understand the person in front of us. Maybe that chance leads to something more. The first impression isn't always the greatest.
thank you for the wonderful story!! its always a great pleasure to read your stories!
Intriguing. I loved the gentleness. I do think you need to work on your writing. It’s good that you use simple words, but the rhythm of the sentences is often monotonous: She called him. He came. She said ‘lift your arm.’ He lifted his arm. That doesn’t make for exciting reading. You don’t describe the characters in detail. That’s good. I don’t need to know how tall he is or her cup size. Show, don’t tell. I'm looking forward to the sequel. Hope my comments are useful.
Yeah, thank you. It is useful. I do need to work on my writing. Especially the: she said that, he did that part.
Enjoyable but not really that erotic. I hate all the whips and chains nonsense in most FemDom so this was a pleasant change. However, for me, it was all a bit clinical, almost a to do list. Press here, squeeze there, rub that & suck this. The silly instructions and the patronizing attitude would have earned her a slap in most cases.