All Comments on 'First Time in Public'

I would have given it 5 stars, but there were a number of distracting typos and reversed words

The story line was good, but it seems that spell-check was the only editing performed. All of the words were spelled correctly, even when they were clearly the wrong words and did not make sense. I know it is easy to see what you think you wrote, but either you should carefully read the story before posting or have someone else (an editor?) read it to be sure it actually says what you think it does.

It was like an explosion of sensual passion, incredibly erotic and I definitely loved it but I think you would probably benefit from an editor or at the very least someone to proof read before you submit a story.

A couple of things just didn’t make sense, so I thought highlighting them might help;

“You love the risk of someone finding out the white you are." - um, white?

“She felt the warmth of the line against her asshole” - line?

“only a little farther and it she would have“ - ?

It’s pretty damned obvious to me at least that you have talent for this writing thing! Looking forward to reading more, thanks for sharing.

Tess (UK)