All Comments on 'First Time Posing Pt. 05'

Nice story, but it still could do with some editing effort to ensure that punctuation, missing words, wrong words and general spelling and grammar are improved. Fortunately, even these little annoyances do not detract from the storyline much.

Hopefully my writing is becoming easier to read. I go over the parts about six or seven times before I post them.

If I have someone proof read the stories, I will not become a better writer, so bear with me and hopefully, I will become a better writer, one that will not irritate you.

Thanks for the feed back, constructive criticism is always welcome.

Each chapter a new adventure!