All Comments on 'First Times'

by JaxRhapsody

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DVant10denCDVant10denCover 3 years ago

Well written, Enjoyed it almost too much...

nutcase666nutcase666over 3 years ago

Would love to see it continue with further parts its really good

Dark_StormDark_Stormover 3 years ago
Follow the bouncing tense

Once again your story bounces back and forth between present and past tenses.

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Jax Lazzo Rhapsody, just trying to get my stories known. This is essentially an experiment in my craft of writing. I will be trying different things here and there. I concluded this was on of the best sites, although pretty archaic, is simple to use. I'm trying to expand, lea...