All Comments on 'Flora And Milo's Secret'

Loved it, very well done for something of just 2 pages. 5*

Repeatedly ignoring correct sentence structure and dialogue punction automatically gets 1 star. When that happens so early in the story, it also means I don't even struggle through to the end.

Grammar facilitates communication, and when it's ignored, the communication is broken. Broken communication is no communication. Putting something out there for people to try to read without using proper grammar means you're not communicating what you think you are, so why bother?

The grammar could be improved but I read it without difficulty. 5*. There are some who get so worked up about grammar it's amusing. I sometimes wonder how they get on in real life, conversing with people with imperfect grammar? I suspect they don't get out much.

"punction"?

I wasn't a big fan of the fact she was drunk. Other than that, I would recommend an editor to clean up to story a bit. Overall, I found it to be a pretty good story. I would like to read more from you.