All Comments on 'Flowers in the Park'

More please

Good beginning!

5

Ah NO!!! drop it, don't pursue this......... dead in the water.

Can't wait for more

More please. This was a good beginning.

Nice Hallmarky beginning! 5 stars on the schmaltzometer.

Great start to a beautiful romance! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

"Dead in the water?" Hardly. I think this story can be continued. I do have a couple of comments though.

This remark seems gratuitous: "the first of several dalliances, as it turned out" - seems unlikely in the space of just two months. I have mixed feelings about the picking of wildflowers. At a minimum, that means the individual plant will produce no seeds that year. Even in the case of perennials picking the flowers can put undue stress on the population over time. If there was a passing mention that the population of this species in the park was substantial, I would have been ok with it.

More please!

I have two more chapters submitted, one of them was submitted on Valentine's Day. I hope they get published soon, I'm not sure what the hold-up is. Thanks for your nice comments!

You think up stories and I only read stories; so therefore you're way up further on the ladder. Having said that I cannot believe the characters are humans. Alex is an A.I. based on Kelly Bundy and Wes senior is based on a creepy version of Beeker from the muppets.. And Wes j.r. is there to have the audience appeal because children in romance stories make the vote score go up.

When Wes makes his son go to Alex to tell her the flower pickup line she should have been alert that his daddy is creep from the highest order, having set his little kid up as wingman. When Wes asks her " what's a beautiful woman doing in the park by herself ", she should have told him " that's worse than the worst bar pickup line, are you sober enough to supervise your kid? " And when Wes tells Alex that little Wes was his biggest mistake she should have just walked away, but nooooo; Alex knew Wes was an amazing father because his chest swelled ( with pride?? ) when he watched his son on the playground equipment. Jeez she can't get more Kelly Bundy than that hey.... Well I guess they deserve each other. Oops I've just made my own end to the story

A really good start! I

1 star because I dislike multiple short chapters published over multiple days, weeks, months or years. I've been disappointed by starting a great story only to discover the author didn't finish the story.

@IEnjoyErotica it's finished! What a lousy reason to give a 1 star rating.