All Comments on 'Forbidden Demand'

Ich wünschte, meine Deutschkenntnisse wären besser. Übersetzungstools verlieren die Nuance. Gute Geschichte.

Nice premise.

Sex starts too abruptly.

Why didn't she react to the lotion that dribbled down between her breasts? She could have told him to 'catch' it, or she could have 'caught' it herself, and rubbed it into her breasts.

Needed greater details about how he touched her. And about how she touched him. Some slow jerking of his cock, while she got used to it, and enjoyed its feel in her hand, while she watched his reaction/s to it would have been nice. Some dialog about what each was doing to the other, how it felt to them both, and what he/she would like to do/have done to them would have helped.

She could have asked him what he thought about when he masturbated. Did he watch porn?

What kind turned him on the most? Did he ever think about her? What did he think about?

In the hot tub, could have used some her sitting over the jet and letting it stimulate her while he played with her breasts.

Four stars.

YES. Please continue!!! Thanks

Hot. Especially if you yourself did all the German to English translation.

"TO BE CONTINUED"

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Fatal words to end a story that doesn't have a chapter number in the title.

Dear readers, thank you for your feedback, especially the request for more detailed descriptions.

On the translation question: I did the translations roughly with a translation tool, but then revised them myself for the finer points, and also rewrote some passages to make more sense in English.

I appreciate your advice and will try to incorporate it into part 3 (part 2 is already finished and in the approval process)!

Although I'm usually enjoying daughter Fantasies, This Has the Makings of a Epic Story ! (Let There be More..you Know what I want ) 🍼🌊😋

Enjoyed the story. Looking forward to a continuation in English

Good story. Well written, brought the reader to a pitch io await the next chapters. Hope they continue through the pandemic.

The fact that English isn't your first language is somewhat obvious in the story but because in some places it was a hard read. But overall I enjoyed it. A good premise, lead up and a fairly hot scene at the end. Personally, I kinda liked that the sex started abruptly because that's just how I like it.

I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Dear readers, thank you again for your comments! I am happy to announce that I have revised chapter 2 again and it is now back in the release process.

"TO BE CONTINUED"

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That information belongs in the title in the form of a chapter number, NOT after the story has been opened. Too little, too late. Automatic rating of 1.

Yes! Please continue.

I was very interested and want to read the next chapter or two even!

Can’t wait to continue

It's all gone quiet. Hoping the story continues soon