All Comments on 'Forbidden Forest Pt. 01'

If you start a story, finish it.

Thanks for the feedback.

Has the makings to be great!

Where is the rest of it? You started out well but finish what you start. Nobody wants to read unfinished work unless they're aware beforehand. -2 for being lazy.

Wow, there really are some very rude anonymous people out there.

On the plus side I think the story was good enough to catch their attention and keep them interested, but the lack of a definite ending probably left them wanting more which wasn't there.

If this was supposed to be the first part of a longer story then I think literotica has a mechanism for marking so people know before starting that they will have to wait for the next part. If it was a self contained story then it probably needed a few more paragraphs to show exactly what happened to Frank.

Either way I think the contents of the story were great and the sprite came across as very cute and sexy. So I hope you will not be put off by some people's rudeness but continue to write and post stories here.