by CincyPolyCouple
Good story idea but very disjointed and jumbled writing. Way more thought and editing required. 2 stars
You have fantastic descriptive language! However I couldn't quite place where the character was and the story seemed jumbled up. She came before being told to....?
Hurray for first person accounts from inaccessible places!
How am I reading this?
Did the character write it before being sucked into hell? Just finishing off that last bit before disappearing?
Am I in hell reading it? Do I get that kind of free time?
Does Hades have a publishing house outside of the underworld?
Wtf?