All Comments on 'Forgotten Ch. 01'

please keep going. wonderful 1st chapter. names are very similar...maybe use nickname Shell a bit more?

Really enjoyed your first chapter. I'm hooked now. Looking forward to chapter 2.

I really enjoyed it!! Keep up the good work

Really good!! Can't wait for more!

great start to a story looking forward to more thank you for sharing. Also the writing was very good mechmanas

and an interesting premise. Keep it up. I look forward to more!

I liked the story however i felt it was rushed and confusing in parts. The mating scene was well written. it certainly cries out for a second part.

I like this, but I'd advise an editor if you can find one. There's a lot of punctuation errors in the beginning, and it makes the story a bit choppy. Things move too quickly as well. Does Michelle know Michael is a werewolf? Is she one? It's hard to believe that Michelle goes from never dating anyone to sleeping with this man, and that as a wolf, he mates with her with no explanation of what it means to her. There's a lot of good stuff here it just needs to be brought out.

A LITTLE FAST FROM ASKING TO BED BUT I DO GUESS THAT YOU WILL EXPLAIN WHY SHE DOES NOT NO SHE IS A WOLF AND WHEN HE FIRST MET HER

Next chapter please!!! Loved it!!

OH I LOVED IT!!!

I so want another chapter posted...like now? lol

So...she doesn't know she is a were? Or she does know she is a were? :)

Can't wait for more!

Really good start..keep working on it...I agree with PennLady find an editor and things will be so much better....can't wait for the next chapter!

PLEASE TELL ME THERE WILL BE MORE PLEASE

i like ur story! dun stop now!!

Will the continuity of this story be the same with your title Forgotten hiks hiks hiks. I hate to find a un-ended stories.....

awsome story thasnk you can't wait to read next one

I like the story. I felt like you rushed it a bit when it went from her having no clue he liked her as more than a colleague to her accepting that he loved her. I am also unsure if she knows anything about her being a wolf? I don't think she does but I am unsure since she asked if it was a moonstone and then seemed to ask if he loved her right after like she knew what it meant. She also didn't apologize or act shocked that she had bit him so maybe she knows..hopefully you can clarify it. I hope you'll tell us a bit more about who he is...is he part of a pack? I look forward to seeing where the story goes. I like the easy chemistry you've shown them to have with their career and such in common.

such an amazing first chapter! wow! ok i'm off to read chapter 2.

I LOVED it :) Well done/started. Very nice all around (even very few typos :)

You have me, go ahead and take me.

Wow

The description indicated she was abandoned by the pack but I didn't see anything like that in here. I do agree with one or two others that it was rather fast paced but I am definitely going to read the next chapter.

mated on their first date ????

This guy moves slow, waiting 10 years to ask for a first date, then accelerates to warp speed and powers through first date, first kiss, "I Love You," first sex, and mated for life in a matter of hours.