All Comments on 'Former Friends'

I guess $6000 is a small price to pay!

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Take her to small claims and get the money for the ring back.

Oh yes! 5 stars from me.

Love the drive by stories. The only place left in LW where the man survives the pain of the cuckold pens. Thanks for not castrating him as so many other writers here love doing.

Cute -- 5*

less than half a story, less than half a score

Nice! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Well... you may not have been able to keep it to 750 words, but every one of the words in this short but well-written tale of revenge was worth the 5 stars I gave it !

By the way, if the last sentence is what put you over 750, it was WELL WORTH IT !

Thanks for writing this thoroughly enjoyable story.

Short,but sweet!

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Good quick story…..

Very light, original and funny short BTB, that certainly deserves the best rating: 5* !

TO GOOD

Short, but sweet. An unusual five stars from me for basically a vignette.

JPB

Tom, Adam, then I. Need to work on your POV's.

All these short stories are giving me the hump . They're not clever , far from it .

I can understand how some stories by necessity have to be short , and can be a challenge , but now it's become a trend . It seems almost everyone are happily writing less than a page , and think they are talented for doing it .

I guess having 100 stories or more to your name looks good , until you consider that it likely represents barely 100 pages . Not so good from that perspective .

In this ' story ' , one guy is basically telling another that his ex is probably going to be your ex once you hear this recording .

That's it . Done . No excitement . No drama . No twist .

Score another story against my name ..?.. 55 and counting .

750 words was your goal ? But you overshot ? OK .

So try for something between 3 and 5 pages .

I don't mean to come across as attacking you personally , honestly I don't. I just love a good story , and all these shorts are killing it .

I truly thank you for posting and being brave and honest enough to encourage comments , especially as so many would be authors happily knowingly write utter crap and can't face the criticism .

Mari91

Since you slipped past the 750 word limit, you should have continued to a more satisfying conclusion.

Very nice and quite complete, thank you

Wow

I like the twist in the end

That worked! Thanks for sharing.

Nice!

Nice 'comes around, goes around!'

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Be well!

Very funny.

Thanks @Regguy69

Pretty darn good. Hopefully, the birch is going to get burned by his former friend…although that’s going to be tough without that prenup.

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4 ****

"750 words was my goal, but I overshot a bit." - Thank you for not trying to force it.

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"Of course, I sold your ring." - That's evidence to sue her for the money. Great minds think alike, Maximus.

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I wonder if that recording could be used to annul the marriage due to fraud?

Not bad. Since you missed the 750, should have fleshed out the ending more.

Meh. She basically won (no pre-nup), with zero retribution. 4 stars (should have been 3 but I added 1 for brevity - unlike other people I appreciate short stories)

Ouch! Good one.

3 stars - I did not like this little essay.

I would never have tried to warn the ASSHOLE

10 Big Blazing Stars for @REGGUY69 Nice short story. Writing a short story is a BIG challenge. Especially when you have so many "asshat' naysayers making derogatory comments. LOL just delete them. The asshats love to shoot down a writer after he has put in 40 or more hours on his work. They don't appreciate how hard it was to create this fine story. So what if you did this or that, That you did anything was WAY MORE than the asshat complainers. REg Guy, if you don't know how, DM me and I will explain. After I post a story, I watch the comments as they come in. If I don't like them....."Delete" right now! LOL. Meanwhile. your story was very interesting, I thought. Where the fucked over friend come back to let his old buddie know that his new wife is just a "gold digger" and waiting for his family to pass and leave him a fortune! LOL what a shock that would be! But maybe there is a chance he can do something to prepare for the "Gold Digger" wife. That is about the only advantage to being poor, those kind of women stay away. Thanks Buster2U

Well written but a poor story

The reveal would of been nicer after they divorced and she took him to the cleaners. After the reveal he goes insane and proceeds to torture and mutilate the cunt, taking out each and every ounce of rage, fury and madness on her.

Yeah, old Buster can teach you how to delete comments. He deletes anything that doesn’t kiss his ass.

So she basically wins. Even if she decided to practically broadcast her evil plans like a parody of a villain. Pointless story. Doesn't even work as revenge since the one getting the shaft is just another victim.

She is a naughty lady!

She doesnt win in the divorce. Even without a prenup, only married 3 years. Will get some money from what he earned in 3 years, but not much.

Decent. However, overshooting the 750 words misses the point of the format. With a bit of editing, 750 words would be achievable.

Amusing

Excellent.

Loved it!

Follow up needed

Tom deserved all that and a punch in the mouth.

Hehe. Glad Tom was stupid enough to get a prenup.

5 stars as payback is a Butch and Karma is her sister

Excellent short short!