All Comments on 'Found Pt. 02'

I very much enjoyed chapter 1. I Hated the turn this chapter took.

Well, this was different. I will continue to read as I'm interested in the story. I enjoyed your writing style. Please continue and thanks for your time and imagination.

I've so enjoyed the 2 stories so much and can't wait for the next. Fo those of us that were around before the internet, it reminds me of the old Bee Line novels. A good story line with erotica. For those who criticize the story telling, go to the library and read Moby Dick.

You ask your readers to leave reality at the door when considering your stories. The least you could do is add a disclaimer of the fetishes you'll be encountering when one enters. I really liked ch1 but what you're adding with the island detracts from the story for me. With 6 more chapters to go hopefully there's more of ch1 than ch2 in the following chapters. And if not just put a sign out front that says torture ahead

When will people in this section realize that sharing is not caring in this section. A decent story ruined. Not even worth the 1 star ratings

It's was a ok read, ch 1 was a miles better read the sharing I think spoils it there's no way a guy like that could of sealed with other people using his women, his mum yes as he wants to abuse her. Please return to how ch1 was.

I like that the humiliation of his mother wasn't to severe. I am waiting patiently for each and every chapter. You actually have me drooling for the alternate ending.

I understand where you are going and how you are fleshing out the characters. While I very much like what I am reading, I would really like to read more about Jenny and Steve. I like a story where people have to surmount experience and overcome something (injustice, flaws and limitations, etc) as it makes the story more realistic; and I appreciate that very much. Ultimately, I want to see where the story takes you and expect that you will take all of the comments with a grain of salt and continue as you feel best. Not everyone is going to like your all of your stories, but so far I do.

First chapter got five stars. This one gets one star. Gross.

but this chapter you lost me a bit, not into this stuf, hope next chapter is more to my liking

This chapter virtually destroyed the story.

every story and piece of work has a bit of a "lul" and this is what this is but, its still very good and I like the way you are developing the characters.

Fucked up piece of shit

I expected something much better than this after reading the first chapter

It is clear that this is fantasy and there is no connection to reality.

She sleeps with a guy naked in bed twice, on an airplane and on a yacht. Then she walks around the mall without her underwear, changing naked in the store. And says I'm sorry, I can't blow you. I believe the trauma is emotional. She hugs him and kisses him to hold him down, giving her sister a chance to give Steve a blow job. This is definitely fantastic.

Is Phoebe exclusive with her brother? Jenny says it often is and Phoebe will never marry another. And then right there on the island she sucks someone else's man's dick. Then from the group.

You lost me as soon as Mom showed up and the sadism started. From a fairly good story line in went downhill to crap. 2 stars.

Genuinely the worst turn the story could have taken. Not reading this POS anymore. Bye bye

Alrighty, then...

Not really acceptable, this submission, after the sssooo beautiful words of Chapter 1...

This is bordering on garbage...I was gonna give 4 stars, but reduced to 3...too many issues with all the characters...and too much BDSM with mom...I know she is a bitch, and deserves to be confronted, but this is WWWAAAYYYYYY TOO MUCH!!

I am gonna read Chapter 3, or make an attempt...hope this does not go on there...

I am not happy, here...I am not fond of being critical like this, but....

Well, this went downhill fast. I hope next chapter is better.

The mom aspect is just plain stupid and not needed and is ruining this story. 4 pages could be eliminated and make this a better story. Ignore the mom period......... Why did you think it neccessary to make this even a point of emphasis in this story. He should be above this, ignore her and go on with the good stuff in life.

I’m out, can’t do this anymore I just wanna beat the main character within an inch of his life, yes he’s caring in ways but quite pathetic in many other circumstances, and how did it go to partner sharing, I apologise but your stories aren’t for me the main characters are pathetic and the stories lack structure and occasionally veer into chaos

I think this another B.S. story, and it sickens me, that a son would be so mean to his mother even if he thought she should have stuck up for him when he was arrested for rape. May be his mom was also a victim because of his own father had issues and threaten his mom to be silent during Steven arrest for a crime he did not commit. I think Steven after the evidence cleared him, he developed a defeated attitude as being a screw up. This story seems so unrealistic it stinks. I think you have sadistic view of life and you are projecting your own insecurities in this story/

Story was going just great until Mother came on the scene. At his point it devolved into Master/Slave, BDSM and you lost me. Sorry, just not at all my bag . . . .