All Comments on 'Four Blessings Pt. 01'

Thought it was a very creative story, and well written! You should definitely continue :)

ok your premise is great. your construction is solid (could be better but you'll get better with practice) your moving the story ahead a bit to fast I think but it works for literary porn . the biggest critique I have is your syntax errors. there are several places where you where GOING to type something and changed it slightly or you revised a sentence entirely and these places stand out because they end up being sentences that don't make sense at all because you didn't read what you wrote. so your reader either checks out there OR rereads the sentence 2-20 times trying to make sense of it. either option pulls them out of the story entire OR the moment your trying to describe. Given that this IS literary porn that is a bad thing. all and all an excellent beginning I for one would like to read more of this sans syntax errors if at all possible.

Please continue

Absolutely loved it! Well written! Can’t wait for more

Can't wait for part 2

worth it you should continue this story :D

It definitely needs some editing, but you've got a good story going here. Looking forward to more!

An extremely good first story! It would be a shame if you did not continue it, please do. For something supposedly written on a whim, it would better than a lot of stuff on this site.

Author did a great job setting up the world and moving the exotic action along with the main plot. Everything was believable in a fantasy world setting. The futa characters although are non-human, are anthropomorphic enough to not feel like the story is themed for xenophilia or bestiality.

This anonymous reader is anxiously awaiting for anticipated aftermath follow ups... Bravo!

Please continue this! For the love of all that is horny continue it!

Great story! all the details and effort you put into this story really show, I can't wait for the next part!

Amazing work absolutely loved it I can wait for the next chapter

I really enjoyed the attention to detail you put into this. Although there were a few grammatical errors, they were negligible to the overall enjoyment I got from reading this marvelous story. I couldn't stop once I started. I hope you continue doing an amazing job my friend and I look forward to the next chapter.

Please continue this I'm invested now

Just an overall great story. Fantastic setting and i love the idea of the blessings.

A few mistakes here and there with spelling but nothing you can't get passed.

Can't wait to read more of this :)

Words cannot describe how much I loved this piece. It pushed ALL my buttons.

oh I very much do enjoy cute ass femboys getting fucked by monster girl futanari. This was an amazing piece. I eagerly await the next part

This was a great fantasy tale in every sense of the word. Well written and kept you engaged the entire time. I want to read more about the bonding and how it changes each of them. Even being a long story for this site I really can't wait to read more.

Wow, okay thank you all for the love. I went ahead and posted the second part after I went over it again. It's not perfect but I am no editor :). The draft is pending so you should see it in the next few days. It's about 7k words longer than pt 01 so I don't know if that factors in.

Once again thank you all for reading and rating.

I’ve always had a thing for stories about futa monster girls and this quickly became my number 1 erotica just from these chapters alone. You’re a very talented writer and good at building up both a plot that’s enjoyable and also that smut we’re all looking for. Now i’m really looking forward to seeing what kind of monster girls we’ll see in future chapters.

Amazing story, very well written.

I’m here hoping for a centaur in future chapters.

I loved your characters, the settings, and the sex. What got me aroused was the thought of putting him into a dress, panties, and a bra while turning him into their slut toy. I only wished it could be me.

Love the story. I really hope you continue the story. One of the best I have read in a while.

LOVE the story. Please continue it.

That story is a piece of art. I wasn’t sure that this would be my kind of thing but it was incredible.

I cannot wait for part 2.

More cannot come soon enough!

fucking spectacular. loved every word, and awesome potential for upcoming chapters. Please keep going!

This is perfection , well developed and so interesting . I loved the characters and the world your creating , can’t wait for the next parts . Hugs hun

I would keep reading for more of the Blessings alone. Very good

I want to read 10 500pg novels about these characters in the style of a lusty futa forgotten realms epic saga series!

This series slaps! I usually just skip to the action but for the first time in a long time, I stayed for the story! Well done my dude!

I don’t find many stories on here that are actually story and not sex based. The soft kink is a nice bonus. I enjoyed the world building.

i gave this story 5 stars although i have to admit i liked the beginning of this story a lot more then the last part although the sex part is great.

I like that he was running away from his village but towards the end it became to much about them fucking then keeping that vibe the beginning had with the adventuring for me he should be on the move seeking more adventure with his harem but that is only my only imagination of this story could go cause i agree this is so well written and i imagine this as a comic book story

Amazing story all it would need to be perfect is just a few small Corrections

Best story in this genre (futa and fantasy) after long time. There's definitely not enough of those around, please continue I can't wait for more and more :)

Love the kinky parts, but definitely would like more story and depth in between them (like at the start). It would make us much more invested into it.

I really like this story overall. I don't like the drive to make him a sissy or forcing him to eat his own cum. Being submissive doesn't mean you have to force him to be a sissy. It also seem like the were starting to gang up on humiliating him. How about more emphasis on loving and cherishing him! Anyway, I hope you will continue with the story and minimize these negatives. Without them I would have called it a solid 5, but had to reduce it to a 4.

Great story so far, never seen the classic macho harem with a strong male center turned inside out like this, very cool idea! Well executed!

Seems to me like you've got some experience writing, this does not read like a first effort. But whatever the source of your skills, please keep it up as this was super enjoyable. :) And FYI, I'm totally not into the femboy kinks you covered. At least not until now..... What have you done to me?

Not only are you writing and amazing story but also exactly what I enjoy in both normal day reading and porn. Good characters, wonderful world building.

Really really really good stuff. I'm jealous of how good this is compared to my own scribblings

Wow that was something else, I really haven't read something this good on here in a while

Amazing

Great

Wonderful story. More please!!!

make more mate

Great story