All Comments on 'Freedom and Consequences Ch. 02'

This series started out so great, then you had to fuck it up with anal, with brand new girl friend as well!!

All that decent grammar use, absent typo's, overall solid beginning, Who's next? Mother, future mother-in-law, rapists? dogs? cats? And all out of the blue? All for nothing! Out of here, not even worth scoring. Aloha. Adios.

Why not ass and sweet pussy?

Need to punish the rape bastards

make sure he gets the rapist and does some damage to them shoot their balls off or their dick

You went from plotting revenge, back to a horny teenager like nothing happened. Out throws the whole story off

I HOPE WE SEE SOME BRUTAL PUNISHMENT OF THE 4 THAT RAPED HER.

4 COFFINS OR CASTRATION WOULD FAIR.

How did she let these Brutal

Bastard break into her house?

Where were her friends?

Karen and Linda and Mike need to move in together.

You fucked up by going from plotting revenge to anal 3 way.

You are all over the place. The rape "story line" was silly and just a throw away. You cooing have made this good but it's completely unfocused

Sorry, but I have to agree with the others. I'm not crazy about the rape part, but understand where it is in the story line. I would suggest that you would show more of the plan to reap vengeance before going on the incest part( you want the reader to feel your story). The incest was good, but could have been stretched out and made more loving. She has been raped and that is a very traumatic event for a woman. I had a job that delt with abused women and saw that they needed more than a three way and fucked in the ass to help them come back. Keep writing. We all can improve on what we do. Thanks for your time and imagination.

This was a good story and i will give you 5 stars. I feel you should have taken more time thou to first finish telling about his revenge and then showing us how he and his sister come closer and eventually sleep together. Having a threesome is dumb, i mean she was just raped, how is she fine with having sex again already? Besides this i liked the story and i do hope he and his sister become a couple and fall in love. Get rid of Karen we dont need outsiders.