All Comments on 'Fresh Meat Pt. 03'

personally reading all 3 of the stories, it started out good and had potential, but it got worse as it went along but thats just me. i do hope you can improve and make better stories by taking what you read from the comments and improve your craft and ideas

Really fun story!

Can't say it is not annoying how these man hating bitches love being proud to destroy relationships, but i think a get the point for this world you propose.

Really hot turn for Lisa, at the beginning i was hoping she would end up with Alex, but happy for the result!

Hope to read more from you!

Hello Really great story, even if I feel it was rushed,you could easily went on 4 or 5 parts but your work is really rare on Literotica so I wouldn’t be to harsh with you and encourage you do to even better.

What about a hung bottom for next Time ? Bottom with huge cock are also really hot you should think about it ! Even if it’s not the taste of everybody keep going and do what you love first ! M.

Well this took a huge tonal turn. It's still good, but it became a different story. I also felt like the world building didn't really pay off. For all of the backstory the protagonist and the setting received, it was barely used. We suddenly had super-speedy character development that made everyone romantically involved and next thing we know, they are free. I'm going to guess you lost drive to develop the story and just decided to end it while the going's good? Or maybe the "too dark" commenters got you second guessing yourself? I hope it wasn't the latter. It was their problem, not a problem with the story. It was well executed, if someone doesn't like it, they should find something they do instead of complaining.

Well, the sex scenes were still good in this part, but I really got into the whole hard domination vibe just for the story to shift away from it. Especially since you had it at a balanced level: no one went too far and the "victims" were also people from the criminal world who deserved some correction. Sonya on Lisa and Mandy on Kim in Chapter 2 were my favorite scenes. So the happy end was a bit jarring, even though I would have been fine with it if it was a longer story and it slowly developed to this point. But I totally get it if you just decided to give your characters a nice ending before going on to another story, instead of leaving them in limbo with a chance of continuation at a later date.

Aside from that, I can only add a few small things. Like the patch working like it did was actually stranger than the energy converter variant: it's more feasible to convert stuff than make it disappear. Also patches are more of a chem thing, maybe a bracelet would have been better, or some sort of implant. Also the warden giving all of them parting gifts was a bit surreal. Like this is some sort of fantasy novel and the kind wizard is giving the party members magical items to aid them in their travels. Also it felt like you're not strong in the whole sci-fi pseudoscience area, so I propose you try just using a magical setting next time instead: spells and potions are a lot simpler to justify by them just being magical.

Another good piece of advice I can give you is that you should consider writing tighter, smaller stories until you get your writer's legs. The kind you can pretty much plan from start to finish before you even start. That way you'll be much less likely to burn yourself out trying to continue a big story with multiple characters and growing tired of the setting. You should leave that for when you get more experience and are skilled enough to plan and execute something that big and also come up with characters, story and setting you will actually enjoy working on for a prolonged time.

Loved it, i liked the romantic twist but I'll say that it should've been at least foreshadowed a bit, the third part almost feels like a different story, and for readers that got in for the first or second parts, well let's say subverting the tone of the story is not the best way to keep readers. Otherwise it's nice clean writing and you tied up the loose ends which is always great. I'll be waiting for more of your work and make the most of your time off. And while I don't really expect anymore I'd love for more parts for Futa Magnet, definitely need to see what Olga and Dr Shaw are gonna do to Terry

Loved it. Wouldn't mind a spin off on the dynamics between Lisa and Sonya going forward

I'm glad it wasn't so predictable. Def liked the direction you went, and the ending was fun. I look forward to more of your writing.

Thank you for ending it on a romantic note, but thank you even more for having Lisa get back and Sonya was really really hoping that would happen

Great story a futa is a person with both sexual organs ( that's someone with a cock and a pussy Brests are not a sexual organ ) but I really enjoyed the story it was full of everything that makes a story enjoyable but I think the doctor was giving them something to make them feel for each and even though Alex is happy now his lawyer still sold him and she should be punished for selling him

So if I was him I'd find a way to punish her maybe send her to a futa prison where she's turned into a fuck toy for a year or two and if she gets pregnant she has it then sent back to finish her time as a fuck toy and the baby given to a loving mother instead of one that would hate it

Just a idea

Sweet tale loved it very much! A little violence, an alot of ruthless fucking, with a 180 change because of the characters. An the true personalities came out in the end. But still the true domination an submission❤️🌹🌹

Boring