All Comments on 'Friends with Benefits'

Good start with some promise for an interesting tale. This chapter did a nice setup and had some spiciness, but there were some issues that could be corrected to improve it and to keep in mind for future works. Punctuation, a repeated sentence (unless that was a browser issue), an oddly phrased comment (“Put in me...”), and a few other little points detracted at least a little from a good read. Take a little more time to reread and edit before the next chapter, or find a good editor if you need help, and issues like that can be corrected and your work improved. That said in a hopefully helpful way, I’m looking forward to the next chapter!

SouthernCrossfire thanks for the feedback. It is well received.

Basically same response. Hard to judge until you write more to add to this start but it shows promise.