All Comments on 'Friends with Benefits Ch. 01'

by SteveRay

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ErotonautErotonautabout 16 years ago
Too short, too little development

The problem with a story this brief is that you need to establish the characters and their motivations really quickly. Other than a sudden desire to wank each other off, there wasn't a lot to this - Jimmy and Lisa didn't even get their rocks off before you called a halt - and I had difficulty believing a trio of virgins would go from zero to sixty without even a shiver of trepidation.

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