by Lord Ranger
I enjoyed this series. I was secretly hoping the brother would enjoy Jessica's breast feeding her son - since there is usually milk enough for two.
While I did love the general idea and plotline of all of the chapters in the series, they all moved too quickly, with not enough detail. In chapters 1 and 2 and somewhat 3, the endings were to abrupt. Overall a good story, however they could definately use a bit of work.
You have a great start to your stories but you really need more detail and more story to it....
The story line is great, but it should have been played out longer, and been much more decriptive