by Wanksalo
Great start!! Maybe a few more details to add to the realism of the story would be helpful (eg. Lube or loosening). Can’t wait to see more of your work
… very weak and amateur writing.. These stories that jump straight to the sexual activity without any buildup or tension are nothing but boring.
Quite a sweet story, a little sudden but that is okay. Otherwise I agree with the comment before
It was a bit too quick. But it would be good if you lengthened the "getting to know each other" part :) It's like a good foreplay then, and the orgasm is more intense :)
Idk what those people are one about. I think it was quite good. Hope to read more from you