by PickyKinky
Wisht this were a film! Very hot. Hope we get to see what happens next! Thanks for writing.
Shame you didn't leave a name so I could direct a personal response to you and ask what else was wrong with it in your opinion. All comments are welcomed! My story might not everyone's thing but I write for myself. If you like it then great, if not then never mind!
PLEASE, pick a name and use it. John, Steve, even Barbara, just NOT "you"!! I did not do anything with you so stop saying "you did {whatever}".
2 Paragraphs in and I'm sure I won't waste my time on this story. 1 star.