All Comments on 'Funny as a Heart Attack'

Nice surprising twist at the end. No BTB, "whats good for the goose is good for the gander..." swapping spouses?

Trash

A GOOD STORY! thanks

Why not? Its just fucking

If ever there was a family that needed to be euthanised this one is it.

There is not one good person in the family.

Three stars. This stories universe is just a bit too small for liking.

Of the characters in this story was very redeeming. Expect maybe his daughters. Everyone cheated except the other guys wife.

Good twist. Five bright shining stars.

Nice twist but not worht a 5*. The one thing that stands out is this author can write a complete yet concise story.

Frankly, I tire of his 10 page tomes that lead to mundane endings.

Excellent writer but storylines are usually so long and redundant they become tiresome.

I like to do two things before reading a new author: Read the bio and look over the list of Stories.

Often before reading a story I read recent comments.

If I had read the comment first I might not have read the story. However in this case the negatives either display the commentator is a poor reader, or has no idea what the story is all about, why the author wrote it.

This story is an excellent take on real life, and is good for a little look into oneself and what makes us tick.

I highly recommend this thoughtful, well constructed story!!! Well done Carvohi!!!

The Hoary Cleric

Ha ha! Looks like your request to be told how your readership felt about your characters in this story has obtained a result (per immediately preceding anon - which I’m going to be reading as a witticism!)!

Oh how messy and sad is life, where our baser elements are let off the leash.

Awful characters, but really well written, and a delicious twist in the tale! 5#

Clever twist. Well done.

This answers the question of how to populate a story with really awful characters.

Great twist. Six stars for that!

I loved the twist at the end. A good read.

Didn’t see this coming. It appears Court is a real piece of work. Makes the brother and wife suffer shame and sadness, when he had done the exact same thing to them.

Good story!

Just finished my second reading of this story, and enjoyed plot nuances that didn’t occur to me during the first reading. I like the symmetric way in which the MC is forced to forgive his brother and wife in order to partially forgive himself and Ava for their own indiscretion. Nice word-craft with the final reveal — I like the way your spare and economical use of text subtly conveys the twist without having to beat the reader over the head with it. 5*

Loved this one.Happy endings are appropriate in some cases. 5

Interesting twist at the end

This is one of those stories that I wish I had written. I wish I'd just had the idea. Its compelling and tight and every character rings true. And I bet that ending was just too much to resist.

It seems no matter what happens, Carvohi will always go for the RAAC no matter how ridiculous or improbable that is⭐️

I have re-read this a number of times since my first comment on it a few years ago. As like always in life as you get older your views change. I have to admit I was pretty harsh in my comments on Court. Yes, he was a hypocrite (no wonder he was a Lawyer lol). One thing that we learn from him is that he loved his family, people make mistakes. Hell, I've made a lot myself but like my Mom always told me everyone deserves a second chance. I've since changed the score from three stars to five stars so thanks Mr. Clampett. xxx

Nicely done, 4 stars

It figures, he was cheater him self and with his sis-in law. Why don’t they open their marriages? What a bunch of hipocrisia

Wife has sex with husbands brother twice and everybody's ok? This should be listed under fantasy.

I loved it. The great little twist at the end pulled it from a 4 to a 5. After reading in through a second time I thought that you did a great job hiding the true story Kudos.

Karma, wasn't it?

Great story as always, thanks.

So many cheaters in the story, plus he's a liar. Ughhh!

Piece of shit story with another weak man that is a part of so many of these shitty stories in this category.

My eyes my eyes... Oh goood ... They are bleeding.

I can't stand to read anymore.

Somebody please give me acid for my eyes.....

Nothing but sappy RAACs.

Hmm. Seems he had very good reason to be so forgiving, since he had still been screwing his ex girlfriend (his brother's wife), and fathered one of her children. At least they kept it in the family.

Seems that Shitheels run in the family. Yup, sure nuf!. LP

Pathetic.

wow, what a twist at the end about Angela being Court and Ava's daughter. Otherwise, a standard story but very well written. I think that Amy sensed something.

Wow, what a surprise ending. I guess they were all cheating pieces of shit. Good story and very well written.

I wasn't happy with the ending Here I was, liking Courtny And he turns out to be a cheating bastard himself

Very nice twist at the end. Up until then I was ready to sound like the BTB crowd.

"He was so kind. He listened. He cared. He really cared." - How does a presumably intelligent woman fall for that crap?

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Before the twist, I was thinking that he was going to bang Ciara, that mybe he HAD already been banging her!

Older Carvohi comment Re: Regulation - Why is it those who decry government regulation of polluters, or unsafe products, or government intrusion via mask or vaccine mandates, are the same ones calling for the greatest intrusion of all, a woman's right to terminate a pregnancy. Not to mention regulation of who we can marry, what we can teach, etc., etc.

Pretty much not a likeable character in the entire story.

"So, nobody's perfect."

Kind of a fucked up view of the world. The presented logic is that since nobody's perfect then we should just be accepting of people's shitty decisions and bad behavior because who are we to judge. That, since nobody's perfect nobody then no one should be held accountable for the actions or behavior.

To say nobody's perfect is like saying the sun is hot. The issue is that this idea of 'nobody's perfect' is also often thrown around in relationships as a way of excusing big ticket mistakes like infidelity or major lies or betrayals. Many use the phrase "nobody's perfect" as an enabling phrase, placing their specific harmful actions in the context of a universal truism. Its basic "gaslighting 101". Using the phrase "nobody's perfect" is deflection behavior and provides the offending person with a quick justification for their bad behavior. This deflection tactic quickly moves the discussion away from the offending person bad behavior, the lying, cheating, betrayal or abuse, transforming to to a morality discussion of 'nobody's perfect instead.

“Nobody’s Perfect!” and “Everybody makes mistakes!” are know as the The Perfection Diversion of unethical rationalization. It;s used an attempt to minimize or trivialize the significance of genuine misconduct or bad behavior. The fact that nobody is perfect does not mean that it isn’t necessary and appropriate to point out or judge unethical conduct or bad behavior when it occurs. It also does not mean that people should not be held accountable and responsible for their bad behavior or actions nor avoid consequences for said bad behavior or actions.

Everyone seemed to be so understanding, so calm (well, not 100%). I had a slight expectation that Court would have been involved with Ciarra after all - but I certainly didn't see that twist coming. It put a lot of the other aspects of his reactions into context, made them more understandable. Thank you, a neat story.

I really hope something happens in the future to expose those two. The daughter is given a genealogy kit as a present, she has an accident and the blood does not match for some reason. Tick, tick, tick. The clock is running................... I hate cheaters with a vengeance.

Well written and creative also some typos but not a big deal. I try to make comments that are constructive not just criticism. I don't yell cuck or wimp. We all need to make our own choices. People are all different, reactions are different too.

The whole bit with the DNA was absurd and frankly stupid given the ending. No real emotions demonstrated in the story, especially from the wife. Threatening to kill herself but still slept with his brother twice. Poor. But a cute little twist at the end

2 stars - no comment

A really great story. Especially the ending when we found out that Court was not as pure as the driven snow. I for one enjoyed the twist. LP

If I was him I’d have had a double order of shrimp !

Great twist. Well told story. Also throwing in the heart attack to give the story time to percolate. Really good story telling, and I love it. I have only read one story where the purported grieved spouse was also a cheater. This one was better and held the kill shot till the end. Also better because the writer told the story in a reasonable length. BTRH...

Author cheated on the readers. For 98% of the story, it was all about how the cheated on hubby would deal with his wife who cheated on him with his brother. Lordy…what a mess! So for 3 pages we rode along with him as he told us — remember, this was written in 1st person style — how he would deal with it all.

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Then the “big reveal”….he had cheated first with brother’s wife, and got her pregnant! No fucking wonder he was so nice to his wife and brother!

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Author cheated readers.

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2 **

Gross. Two things can rarely be forgiven. Having someone elses baby or sleeping with a family member. Has he no soul? Frank threatened i.e. blackmailed the wife and she gave no indication she was looking for a way out. Frank also said he loved her so how do you face Franks wife going forward? Doesnt she get to know, ever? Now all three of them are bonded together by this huge dirty secret. The story was lame, poorly thought out, and rather vile.

I was ready to castigate you until the last paragraph, nice save !! Your writing as always is excellent I did like the way it was headed with another weak wimp but as stated prior you made a big save in the end. Definitely a 5 star story

I liked it, especially the twist at the end. 5 stars.

Nice little twist at the end. Good syory!

Pathetic.

Thanks, now I remember why I had stopped reading your stories. So, here I go again!

And how did your guy manage to find a 1/24th pure precious metal diamond?

Who in their right mind would insist on paternity tests, when they knew it could open the door to his brother doing the same. If the character is a cheater, then they should be good at it.

I liked the surprise at the end

The whole story was about his wife and brother cheating, only to find out he is a bigger dickhead. And covers it up. He should have been found out and pushed aside like the piece of shit he is.

Great story much better than btb tripe that we are constantly subjected to. Great unexpected twist at the end, I will read another of your stories soon

The twist did it for me, I was ready to hang the cuke. Great tale.

One of the best stories I've ever read on Literotica! Easily, a top 100!! 5++++/5

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Even being a common theme, you took the plot in places no one's ever gone, and you used authentic behavior, strong, well-written characters and good dialogue to do it. The only downside is all the back story towards the beginning. Unless it's germane to THIS story, cut it back to the minimum; let us know the characters but unless an aspect of their meeting, dating, etc. affects this story, cut it out. I speedily read through it, because you had a GREAT story going, and all the impedimenta just stifled by interest as a motivated, interested reader!

Therefore, really well handled.

Usual good mechanics.

5-stars

I always love a twist. Maybe I’m slow but I didn’t see it coming. Thanks for the story!

Given what we learn at the end, the DNA ploy wasn't very smart. Didn't make much sense for a smart lawyer, FBI agent.

I HATED IT...UNO ESTRELLA!

Got me at the end! I "get" why he was so lenient with his brother, of course, but if the brother had any sense, it would have had him wondering "why". Maybe not immediately as he was overcome with relief, but later in retrospect, he would. (At least I would have thought - "that was too easy"....) 5* regardless~

Two assholes & two whores... That's what this waste of time boils down to...

That is one pretty sick pair of brothers.

That was a great story with one hell of a twist. Old Jed can write, and that's a fact.

He doesn't have much to complain about does he?

Smartly written

Nope: I remember reading this one

Nope!!! Still a RAAC/ Cuck story...

Agree with comments

Miserable bunch

I thought you were wimping it again, but the ending explained his cool calm collected outlook.

A story about multiple cheating by all of them. What a miserable horrible group of people. What a bunch of shits, scores 3/5

Court's cool, level-headed approach to his wife'e infidelity threw me throughout the story. The guy was cool as ice. The ending clears that issue nicely.

Well done. I enjoyed the story and the ending was a nice surprise..

For drama

Great tension and lots of conflict, with a smooth, believable resolution.

And the kicker at the end. Never saw it coming.

Thank you!

=alextasy

where guilt is a great forgiver. TK U MLJ LV NV

I would not have done what He did .. But then again I bet his wife and Brother have his balls on the Fireplace... In a Snowball so he can shake the snowball and see his Balls

NOT CLEVER....DISGUSTING! He's just a wimp!!!!

saved this from a 1. Clever...very clever.5

and the twist explains a lot. 5*

I think other people have said it already just enjoyable till the end then catches you out it’s just to enjoyable not to pass on this story just hooks you in and you are away well done and just don’t stop writing

Another great story from one of the best. Carvohi can turn a story about four flawed people into a winner. The twist turned it into something great.

when you get to a certain age, you find out about things that you may have suspected but never really pursued. So, now you know. It's not important now, it must not have been important then. Good story. Thanks for sharing.

Next time you come up with a thought like this story, just do the world a favor and don't write it. Honestly, I'd rather have a colonoscopy done with a rusty rake than suffer through a steaming pile of shit like this again.

I can't believe what a Hypocrite Court is and what an adulterous liar!!! He makes his wife and brother come clean and then puts his wife through hell with insulting DNA tests while keeping his adulterous affair with his sister-in-law that actually produced a daughter an incestuous secret??? This is from a so called Christian? Just so everyone knows, God explicitly stated that He will personally avenge those who defile the marriage bed of a Christian Hebrews 13:4!!!

Tack? If you keep nitpicking like this, I swear I'm going to loose my mind!

I never understand why cucks dont take the easy out and go back to fucking the cheating whores

Then I remember its a cuck-vohi and all the men a spineless scum sucking shit stains, like him

The twist at the end locked this story into a nice neat believable package. 5 stars!

"I took a different tact", no, you didn't. The correct nautical term is "I took a different tack", as in a port or starboard tack into the wind. Yeah, nitpicking, but, words actually do mean something.

He got away with a Big One. Ava was his first but she married his brother and that should have been the end. Now with him doing the DNA it will make his brother and wife suck it up.

I'll bet this story pissed off the BTB crowd! Good story just the same. Besides, if Court can get passed her indiscretion, then who the fuck is qualified to criticize. The answer to that is easy: no one.

....Has it exactly right. Without the epilogue, the protagnist's behaviour is inexplicable but the "twist in the end" ties it all together. 5*s.