by MaxingMollz
Wow, a great start. Sorry to see there seems to be only one more chapter, meaning the story cannot be complete - this first chapter gives hints of much more to come.
Your style of writing is so unique. Its enthralling. I really want to see more of this story. I want it so bad im starting to itch all over in anticipation. Please continue this. It is perfect.
keep going, don't let anyone tell you HOW to write, keep with your own style
Don't pay the frustrated anonymous any mind. When I'm writing a technique I use to take it slow, is to describe your senses in your surroundings. The sound of the waves crashing, the smells near the beach, how the weather feel. Another trick is to describe detailed actions like waving a hand , wiping the sweat off of your brow. Details like that make a good story better.
Great start, but it felt a little incomplete. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I agree I seems you left the chapter short and incomplete. Please make it longer and in more detail
There is a difference between a cliff hanger and am incomplete thought. I get so frustrated with in complete chapters on this site. Finish a chapter then post.