by GhostWriter1232
good story, only one thing.... you are mixing between languages, spanish and portugees are diferent. The main character is thinking in spanish but it's calling names to jane in portugees.
An extra tip, i understand that "Such a good cum dumpster" is an english frase, but the spanish best translation it would be "Que buena traga leche" (Such a good milk swallower). The frase "basurero de semen" its not commonly use in spanish. Thats all