All Comments on 'Gabriel & Persia Ch. 01'

But, when it happens, the sex happens too fast. Why did they both have to get naked -- and be naked -- before any sort of sex takes place? So much more could have taken place that involved teasing: him teasing her and her teasing him before the fucking.

You needed a proofreader when you wrote this (and you still do):

EVERYWHERE is one word, not two.

There's a big difference between TRUST, and THRUST.

Even so, I gave it 4 stars.d