All Comments on 'Gabriela - A Lovely Married Woman Ch. 01'

by Ulfric24

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blackice51blackice5129 days ago

SPELL CHECK, couldn't even finish the story.

DessertmanDessertman9 months ago

I agree, i stopped reading because of the use of he instead of she.

I you get it cleaned up i may come back to it.

AnonymousAnonymous12 months ago

Beautiful story , please continue

26thNC26thNC12 months ago

Not only is he a big black clown, he’s ugly too.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

Awful and dislikable story

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

pig

nightdragon1nightdragon1about 2 years ago

What a piece of a shit story. Even a little child knows the difference between "her" and "he". You need to pull this story, proof read it and then repost it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

This is a great story! It's cool to see Gabriella start to enjoy sex with this repulsive man. Continue the story, please. The sequel should be that Gabriella starts to get addicted to sex with this man, or even develop feelings for him.

Good luck

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Please continue :-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Greate story!

Please continue :-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Not very well written. The author uses the word "He" when the word "She" should be used, and vice versa which makes it hard to follow at times. I would strongly suggest using a very patient editor.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Come on your just getting started...

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

write the next chapter soon

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Hot stuff. Please continue!

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

What the hell was this? Badly written garbage. One Star.

OldskierOldskierover 2 years ago

Surprise lust and a big cock will make a loving wife into a raging slut ! So how long before hubby finds out and divorces her ass or maybe he could pimp her out for the money…….

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Am filing this one under "close encounters of a wandering mind". WTF!

Finchy1955Finchy1955over 2 years ago

Try writing in understandable English

iameaseliameaselover 2 years ago

I just farted a better story.

Unreadable to a huge degree, even trying to skim it gave me a migraine.

Judging by the comments you're just another retread cuck writer.

Thats all we get these days and not even decently written ones. There hasnt been any decent written ines in a couple years because it seems everyone thinks they can write. And no, you cant.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

he and she have different meanings, to hard to follow

someoneothersomeoneotherover 2 years ago

I could hardly get past the first paragraphs because of changes between "him" and "her," but kept reading and then just skimmed because there was nothing worth actually reading.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Might be a good story but author not knowing use of pronouns makes reading impossible.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

A lovely married woman, yet she cheats on her husband? Seems like a contradiction, from the very opening.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Strange story…

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Couldn’t get past the first page, kept changing genders, totally confusing.

26thNCuck26thNCuckover 2 years ago
5 Stars

Amazing.

-26thNC Approved

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Garbage. Another otherwise happily married mother suddenly struck by the Martian slut ray. You hinted at a continuation, please don't, once was bad enough. You need to find a hobby you're good at, because you suck at writing erotica. It wasn't worth a score of one, but they have nothing lower.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

So Gaby gets divorced and the Don gets a funeral.

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