All Comments on 'Gaius and the Vampire'

But it seemed rushed. There was a lot more detail in the previous story. First story got 5 stars; this one 4. Why are they hunting the vampire? Why is he taking the fang? Are they on a contract? Why do they feel the need to leave right away - concern that Igred will be discovered? The townspeople didn't seem disturbed there was a vampire in the area. And vampires traditionally have super senses - but I'm okay that in the world Gaius lives in, they are like people, just undead. Anyway, just some things that popped into my head. Keep at it. Thanks for sharing!

It was a bit rushed. I tried a couple of different strategies for this second part, and each seemed to get farther from what I wanted. I submitted part three today and hopefully it hits a little closer to the original! Thanks for the input!

I expected more development to the story. Though you did set it up A little in the previous story. The head falling on the cock was hilarious! Can't wait to see what you wrote in Part 3. Thank you also for taking the time to spell check and proof. So many authors do not and their stories are tedious to read. Yours are much better than most on this site.