All Comments on 'Gift'

A number of points here; how can she say she doesn't regret what she did then off herself moments later? "She wanted him to woo her". What, the same way she was wooing him, does she mean? It staggers me how so many people think that the erosion of intimacy in a relationship is a one way street. Who knows, maybe if she didn't always have a headache when he was feeling a bit frisky the roses. wine and chocolates might still have been rolling in?

Sbrooks103x makes a good point in his comment though I rather suspect that the females he refers to exist only in the minds of the male authors who create them or in the porn industry.

Just reading one of my older comments about how she wanted him to woo her. How many stories have we seen where the cheating wife talks about how her husband makes sweet, tender love to her, but sometimes she just wants to be "taken." Guys can't win!

Too dark

3 stars, as this wasn't much more than a bitch reciting her sins .. At least, you gave it a happy ending.

I found this to be a brief but interesting examination of a failed relationship. The ending damn near ruined my day.

Very sad. She clearly had serious mental problems. Her self analysis shows she had been to therapy and had thought about this. But thr stark ending showed her psychosis.

Generally I prefer stories from this author with an elaborate BTB like Death Do Us Apart and Blood from a Turnip series. A lot of the supposed "gray" ones or psychological ones, I find either dreary or repulsive. To each their own I guess.

One of your best

Truly ghastly, hateful story and the last one of yours that I will ever read.

the ending?.nope,never happen, no one would commit suicide for cheating. Anyone selfish enough to put themselves and self gratification ahead of family would certainly not jump off a bridge.

Suicide ending was a mistake. Uggh.

How wonderful that you believe that self-realization should lead to suicide.

So, Mr. Chia-pet, have you ever done anything wrong? I’ve never known a human being that hasn’t, so, time to atone for it. Maybe you could tie a large weight around your ankles and jump into the swimming pool. That could be funny. Make sure there’s someone to count the bubbles!

God, I cannot stand self-righteous assholes like you.

Don't care to read about killing oneself. 1*

I love this woman. Hope many emulate her.

I love this woman. Hope many emulate her.

Left out the probability that the person you cheat with is valueless.

She made a big spash!

If she doesn't regret what she did!

Why? Not sure what or where you went

You missed the class on avoiding absolutes or if you have never taken a writing course then I suggest you educate yourself. It's off putting because most of the time the writer is wrong or unskilled at diplomacy. This isn't a matter of diplomacy here, it's a matter of pop-psychology camouflaged as real advice. Why people cheat is nuanced and cannot be broken down to a short story or one page article on cosmo. Some of what you wrote is true. Communication is necessary for a happy marriage. Cheating still happens even in happy marriages. I have observed it professionally. One cannot write all encompassing statements.

I am sorry folks but sometimes cheating happens and it takes a while to unpack why. Ultimately the reasons do become clear but there is no one size fits all answer. This is the case for both men and women.

Yes and she made a good choice. I wish my x daughterinlaw would do the same. The fucking evil bitch.

It's all about what "I wanted". Cheating wives of literotica(and maybe in real life too?) don't give a damn about what their husbands might want too. Epitome of selfishness.

Could she not jump before devore and save him from giving her most of everything.

I guess hindsight doesn't always cause total repentant.

selfish to the end.... glad she made it easier for the hubby to move on.

Hard hitting story and cheating wife's landing. Great story.

Stupid woman

That's rare here. 5

That should be ultimate goal of writer

To have story read and enjoyed

Whilst what you said sounds like it represents some good thinking, it isn't much of a story.

Me me me me me.

This wife was sorry for getting caught. Totally selfish and self centered woman. She doesn't regret the affair one bit and takes the ultimate act of selfishness by committing suicide.

550 feet? Wow! Wonder who is going to clean up that mess.

I didn't see this coming at all. I figured she had moved on and found someone new. With all the talk about it not being wrong I was completely fooled. Good author.

I didn't see it coming, but I think it worked.

Because it’s fiction, we can say the wife telepathically sent the message to an experimental psy-reading machine run by a university on the other side of the planet. The whole thing was recorded from beginning to her *splat* end in the cold fridged waters 550’ below on the multi-petabyte SSID storing each days accumulated data (to be transferred to holographic crystal storage within 72 hours, except for variously flagged readings).

It wasn’t until the next day, when a student technician came in to read any interesting readings flagged by the computer, the suicide was actually “actualized” by a sentient being. cpete was given an abbreviated report of the psy-readings by one of the professors of the project. And here he transcribed them, taking some literary license here and there.

There. Does that satisfy your linear, closed within the box thinking?

You think these are actual non-fictional stories? That everything you read here is gospel and as true as a straight line? PLEASE get some help. If one tenth of what you read here was true there would be no engagements or marriages anywhere from fear of it never lasting past the initial fuckfest. You need some help my boy.

Seriously.

Yea, the bitch is fish bait.

...for a first person story. Suicides cannot tell us what their thoughts were just before. Only live people talk.

Since she did not tell us what were her thoughts as she jumped, how many more of her previous thoughts did she not tells?

Maybe the whole article/story is false.

Paul in Oklahoma

The bitch deserved it!

Really didn’t like the ending.

Not a happy ending. Though well done. Gave it 4*

Happiness jar within and fill it like she wanted.....

"I wanted my ex-husband to long for me, want me and care enough about me to woo me." This is the missing factor in most of the LW stories. She wants her ex-husband to do those things for her, but what did she do in the early stages of marriage to please him (not sex)? Did it fade away and the marriage became one-sided being it being all about her? Think about it.... we guys have feelings too.....

The composition of the story was very thought out, with the result being I never suspected the end until the last.

Point being, whether or not the wife was punished, wasn't important to the quality of the story. Authors are under no obligation to give us the ending we desire.

And if she's unlucky, she'll survive.

"As I stepped over the bridge railing and leapt into the empty air, that thought of happiness competed with the question of how long before I hit the water 550 feet below."

BEST ENDING EVER!!!

best ending i have ever read to a cheating whore story .

was jump....or stand in front of an express train and ...SPLATTER....NO ONE WILL MISS THE SKANK....

I am more of the BTB persuasion but will accept suicide as an alternate. If she wanted to repay her ex somewhat she could have taken out life insurance in his favor, I am sure this would have made him think more of you.

When she bragged that she had no regrets for the affair, she told me all I needed to know about her heart. It's best that she not be available to ruin another relationship and stain those linked to it.

Powerful compelling story, well written.

I don't approve of her conclusion.

She didn't regret becoming a whore but still killed herself?

Pretty dark and not in a satisfying way.

I wish she would have killed the bitch she let herself become and changed into a better person.

The gift that keeps on giving...

Happiness is .... A warm gun...

all of us adulteress and want to be ones we;'ll all kill ourselves next! So go ahead annony you asshole

Every adulterer should kill themselves. It's for the best.

“I honestly believed that I was a bad person for no longer feeling attracted to my ex-husband.” – Well, if you CHEATED, instead of TALKING to your ex about the problems you found in your marriage, you WERE a bad person!

“I wanted my ex-husband to long for me, want me and care enough about me to woo me.” – Many of the “Loving Wives” want their husbands to “woo” THEM, but it never occurs to them to try to SEDUCE their husbands, though, does it?

It's adultery. Don't do it.

She finally got it right, and made the correct choice! Good for her!

Too many people live in fairytale land, instead of reality. They think the universe revolves around them, that the universe owes them something, for merely being born! Too many people expect a relationship to be that Hallmark myth of 'Happily ever after', with no effort required, and when it doesn't happen, (because it's a myth), they give up, and look elsewhere, anywhere, except where they should be looking; at themselves!

live selflessly, & die willingly. nothing else makes a diff.

dont feel sad she ended her life, rejoice that she revealed the true truth of her life & embraced death the way we ought to.........A GIFT.

You have about 8.4 seconds to cover 550 feet. When you hit the water, the first thing that happens is you get wet. How long do you stay wet? Depends - on how long it takes for someone to find you. B T B !!!

After so much soul searching she decides to jump off a bridge? Good thing not all cheating whore wives arrive at the same conclusion. Otherwise the rivers and canals would be clogged up with drowned whores yearound. There are no barriers set up by man to keep a horny wife in line. The Arabs stone them to death and still they continue to fuck out of wedlock. The Americans shower them with all types of modern conveniences and malls to waste their money on. They usually wind up buying sexy underwear for their lover's delight and hiding it from their husbands. In the event they're caught and divorced, they hit the marriage lottery jackpot and are rewarded with half of the assets in the marriage. The system is broken because there are no real consequences for their actions. And even if there were dire consequences, like stoning, it still wouldn't stop them. The heat in their twats short circuits all rhyme and reason. Much to the dismay of the cuckold husbands and to the glee of future lovers.

But find it odd that she would make these great revelations about herself, then totally waiste the knowledge that could have lead to a great life to kill herself. Usually great self revelation leads to improvement, not death...

....she'd have been far better off to never marry, just hook up with every man/woman/zebra she can find and live solely and exclusively for her orgasms.

Then she will have constant passion forever.

Nothing else matters anyway, right? We can all take a lesson from this story...

Never marry, always hook up and get your orgasm, be passionate or die.

Ph-f-f-f-f-f-t-t-t-T!......

@ LostOneThere The American survivor was a flying fortress machin gun man who jumped from the burning plane without parashut. He did not want to burn, instead of fire he choose the "deep" impact. He fell into a pine tree forrest and the branch of the pine tree decreased his speed and he arrived in deep snow. His body was over with broken branches but he survived.......the German doctors treated him well, he was a miracle.

The story is told. The character fully formed and established. With this ending it doesn't slip into the mediocrity of wife cheats, has remorse, can't get over feelings, and reconciles or divorces and life goes on. There are hundreds of stories like that.

This is a statement about the devastation of letting your gonads rule. Thank you

in your world a slut/hot wife is some one to be idolized. when you should set her free to infest the world with STD's.

Interesting story, odd ending . . . and now another odd ending especially for those who hated the suicide . . . perhaps she survives, and is found miles downstream pretty messed up, no memory of what happened or who she is. She's now a 'Jane Doe' in a hospital for treatment and then in recuperative therapy for a prolonged period. She does not regain her memory.

Sadly, her family never finds her, but finds a trail and evidence of possible suicide by jumping off the bridge. No body is ever found and after a while, she is assumed dead. Ex-husband and his sister both feel guilt . . . though they shouldn't, but they do. Both live alone for some time . . . the ex-husband often wishing he'd tried harder . . . often desperately missing the woman he once felt he could never forgive.

Meanwhile, she gets a new identity, marries one of the doctors who treated her, finds simple but rewarding work she enjoys, and has a happy life. She has many opportunities to have sex outside of marriage (and her husband is actually very understanding and would not be horribly devastated if something brief were to happen). But for some reason, anytime she finds herself attracted to someone other than her husband, she has sudden feelings of revulsion, nausea, and oddly enough, vertigo. As a result of this reaction, any attraction she feels outside of marriage quickly passes. This new 'Gift' it would seem was for her new husband as much as for her (though neither may ever know it).

at 124 mph (200 km/h). Not too many are going to survive that impact. The instantaneous Velocity at the 550 ft point is about 128 mph. But since Terminal Velocity rules come into play due to gravitational changes and air resistance the woman's speed on impact would have been limited to between 124 mph and 126 mph depending on where she was located and her height above sea level.

Although there are at least one Brit and one American bknown to have survived +18,000 ft drops without parachutes over Nazi Germany in WW2. Both were documented and confirmed at the time by the German Luftwaffe.

this one is deep in meaning and I am not talking about the drop into the river... do some thinking on this one folks

It is difficult to understand the about 80-90% of the suicide people have seriouse depression. A family catastrophe (It is independent from the responsible person is his/herself or others) changes an average depression people into deep depression and without medicine (now it has found the Li (carbonate) is the best QUICK suicide prevention medicine until the modern transmitter level increasing antidepressants effect........) the deep depression is deadly illness = suicide.

I'm at odds with myself on this story in that it's well written and reads well but is disturbing.

This is one sick puppy. Two years later she's still obsessing about what she did to her husband. She might have called him up and asked to talk. He might have saved her life. Oh well...

The nice wife had an affair, got caught, shit hit the fan. Sooo she runs away by flying 550 feet off a bridge. Some people refuse to play the marriage game and can't face reality. If her life was so bad why did she get married in the first place? In any organized religion taking your own life will send one's soul to the Pits of Hell, no ifs, ands, or butts. So much for dying for your husband. This was no oops, she fucked up and now there is no second chance.

I have a problem, why did she commit suicide? What happened during the 2 years which caused her to do it? She doesn't regret what happened other than the hurt she caused, which is not a good reason for the suicide. What else happened?

Like the story.

Doesn't make sense, even if try to force sarcasm, it doesn't make sense.

""It absolutely cries out for a longer format".

No it doesn't.

while i agree her suicide was a totally selfish act... It does make sense in one way. The reasoning or explanations the wife used show a mentally ill person. Its a shame no one else caught this.

For example the states early in the story she no longer finds her husband sexually/physically attractive? that she has NO interest in him. and odds are the husband see the changes in her...the yawns.. The fake excuses,..

Yet a few paragraphs down she says she longs for the day when herhusand wooed her.,?! how EXACTLY does that work.?..

WHY would a husband make an effort to be with his wife when its clearshe doesnt want him ?.

Well written as usual.

However, there is absolutely no indication that she would kill herself. Normally, I don't have a problem with a story taking a vacation from reality, but this is Suicide!

I get that a flash story is a wham, bam, thankyou ma'am sort of thing, but this story idea doesn't lend itself to that. It absolutely cries out for a longer treatment.

This certainly WAS a story about a cheating wife.

What it was NOT is ...

Erotic!

Quite the opposite!

2*

... and that ending... Everything I look for in a flash story.

Fortunately, my parachute opened almost immediately and as I floated down I thought to myself "They were right. BASE jumping is indeed the most fun you can have with your pants on."

No explanation as to why she felt suicide was the only option. not my kind of story

The ending was perfect for this wife.

Life is, fortunately, a lot more complex than Marina Pearson's little homilies would have you believe.

And it can be a lot more fun than cpete seems to think (assuming that his thoughts go beyond adding sad little bits to Pearson's homily).

The end doesn't match the rest. No regrets means there was value in the affair and certainly no reason for this end. Can't give more than three.

Perhaps Cinderella or Snow White would be more to your reading satisfaction as it is obvious fairy tales are high on your reading list...

That is fine writing. What a great warning. *****

FrancisMacomber has an excellent story, where the cheating wife gets the divorce document and she is happy for it. She doeas not know her lover is a predator and the predator left her alone soon...........suicid after quick traumatic depression. Sometime the consequence of cheating is deep depression and the deep depression=suicid danger!

added by cpete, was gratuitous and cheap. Why put a suicide into someone's voice, after identifying the original author of the majority of the piece?

Rude of you. You'd like someone to write a story that ends with you shooting yourself?

Green-something

I was torn between a 3 and 4, but her suicide pushed it up to a 5!

Too many of the stories here have wives who don't think to just TALK to their husbands when they are dissatisfied/unhappy in their marriages, giving their husbands the opportunity to improve things, or failing that, have a fair divorce leaving them both free to seek happiness elsewhere.

That's too bad. Their loss.

Not much of a story. No characters worth identifying with. Felt a little sadness about the divorce and then suicide . That doesn't make a story.

The more I think about it, the greater my realization I was generous with my rating.

AMerryMan

The end (last paragraph) seemed like it had nothing to do with the rest of the story... Like someone cut and paste by mistake.

So many people refuse to acknowledge the consequence of cheating and get mad at you if you write a story where you describe a very common consequence: depression and its result. Bravo! Written in the very good tradition of The Celt himself.

too much to rate this. Look forward to another story from u.

I agree with lots of the commentators questioning the jump. Why in the world, after gaining deep understanding of herself, would she jump? That indicates a loss of all hope and clearly, with the understanding she found, she should have hope for "the next one." She is now a more serious person and would treat her relationships more seriously. So why jump? Cpete, is it possible that you just couldn't figure out how to end this one? Please do respond to explain the jump.

Very confused by her words:

Ultimately, I don't regret what I did, though I do deeply regret the hurt I caused.

She didn't regret the affair just the consequences? After all her rhetoric spouted just before she kills herself, all the words in what she should have did, knowing that, she still would've ultimately done the same again. WTF?

Makes no sense at all. This writer picks things out of help books and tries to create stories around them. He hasn't got it right yet.

I would do a sequel where she survives, and gets psychiatric help. Without knowing any marital background would even consider reclaiming their marriage. Sometimes total teardown is needed to rebuild. Her ex has a few sex romps, and comes back to her. They find peace. Or he provides closure with a ringed finger signifying he moved on and away then she finishes the job and does ultimately regret doing what she did, and if allowed a do over she would not cheat.

This story by itself is ultimately pathetic and the scores show it.

Without God, anything is permissible.

Not if she jumped off a bridge.

Sounds more like an immature ex's fantasy. Confess the guilt and then sentenced to death.