All Comments on 'Ginger and John'

right after Masters weekend to boot

only one makes any sense

A nice little story and I loved the humor.

Cute story, seems like they have a good relationship. Only takes one weak moment during these games for the whole thing to blow up, but for the sake of a happy ending, let's assume that never happens.

Some of the exposition during their conversations was a little too clearly for the reader instead of the characters, though. But I guess it was necessary to explain the setup in a limited time, and the dialog's still good.

I loved it .. so unorthodox.. the jokes were funny as was the story ... what’s really funny is for the life of me I don’t know why I liked this story so much , but I really do like it . Thanks for the entertainment and the confusion , yeah they’re strange bedfellows but so is my wife and I !

It's true. Women tend to 'think with their clits' way more than men 'think with their dicks'.

the main reason is women can do nothing wrong in society, so no one sits little teenage girls down and explains this to them. media utterly fails to deliver, telling women they are superior to men in every conceivable way. it's a rare thing....to have an adult woman realize she can be led by her ovaries, because it helps her fight those urges. men have no excuses because media, society, people are constantly over blowing our hormones controlling us. we are WELL aware of our dicks, and how we can be led astray. and it's funny cuz this story has her grandma teach her....her family from 'old country'. that's one of the few generations of women left that got really good advice passed down the generations.

"I should tell you a bit about how we came to be here." - No, you shouldn't have. Four paragraphs that have nothing to do with the story. They're married, so we know they met, dated and got married. Also, why is only the first paragraph of the flashback in italics?

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Wasting a lot of time on Will. The Will business had nothing to do with the story beyond setting her up to be the club manager.

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"I did love it." - It's okay if he loves her being hit on, as long as she says no all the time.

😂 loved it.

That was a lot of fun. I especially especially enjoyed the dialogue. Like a long, well played tennis volley. And I think I fell in love with Ginger! Thanks much.

That last line was very funny.

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Cheers

Just OK...

Well this was funny!

Two stories inside of one story- a bonus? Not really, just confusing to us simpleton readers. Was there ANY connection on any level between Will and Ginger, other than hiring her? It was still an enjoyable read, the writer sure has a way with words. Maybe I just need more coffee.

Funny - While I found the tongue-in-cheek narrative entertaining, it also prevented me from getting to engrossed with the story. 4*

Here's hoping that John and Ginger stay happily married and true to each other. Enough rain falls on the people of Loving Wives, would be nice that at least one couple stays warm and dry.

It was stupid and the story was all over the place..

Where does it go from here?

Five for :

Do I look stupid?

I pissed my pants.

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Fun story(s)! In Silicon Valley, though, Will is far from unique, either in terms of ability or money.

It puzzles me why readers of fiction need to read a fictional story as if it is reality. Fiction, by definition, is the suspension of reality to enjoy fantasy.

Great fun! I agree with SB103, if Ginger is excited by constantly being hit on by all the studs, but always shoots them down, then that could be fun for hubby. It’s a dangerous game, hopefully she never meets the guy she can’t say no to.

The jokes were entertaining. The story was really short and I’m not sure what Will had to do with much of it.

I disagree with Sbrooks103 about the validity of the background material.

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Many flash stories imply (by the absence of background material) that the past has no bearing on the present, and that even the future has little relevance--it's all about here, now, passion, feelings and 750 words.

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So taking a moment to establish why the lounge lizard is permitted to persist in mangling marriages reveals why John the type A has a certain degree of insecurity when he sees his sweetie getting hit on.

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Sure, some flash stories include unnecessary characterization, while others neglect some that could be helpful. Just like when the judges in the cooking shows disagree on how much of the fruit should be included in the dessert--do you include the pulp, or are you just striving for the flavor?

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Anyway, loved the wit of Princess Mary Elizabeth. She made sure hubby knew who she belongs to even while she played with fire.

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Watched about 18 hours of Masters coverage last weekend but never heard that joke. Never met Lucky. Then again, since they spent about 15 hours talking about Tiger, the broadcast didn't really discuss anyone else.

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Wait...could Lucky really be our beloved philandering 5-time champion Eldrick?

5* for the joke!!!

Don't give up your day job because you sure as hell aren't a writer.

I gave 4* instead of three because of the last joke.

Start with a joke, end with a joke. I feel cheated on the story in between.

well done dialogue no nitpicking here

Interesting to get comments both pro and con on background AND to agree with both. To no one's surprise, these tales of mine are not epics created over years of painstaking research. I like an idea well enough to explore it and leave myself some room to expand it - if that seems warranted (to readers, or to me).

Simply not good.

I gave you * because I can't find -1

That was a bit of fun. Nothing earth shaking but better than much of what we've been fed here lately.

And for those questioning whether she would run into a man she cant say no to....then it isnt the man that got her, it was something she was more than willing to bet her marriage on.

Women, and men, for that matter, are rarely "seduced" unless they want to be. In the world of LW women drops their panties in the drop of a hat...because its needed to write what we read, it isnt fact. Even though some here think the behavior the misogynists put to word is truly how woman are (yes I read most comments) it doesnt actually make them that way.

Interesting story!

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Great writing!!! Concerning detractors remember, what Col. Vo, commander of the LLDB detachment at Cần Thơ always said, "So' man try an' do. So' man try an' fail. Odda man not attempt. No attempt, dey all numma 10! Dey not matta fo' na-thing." 5/5.

The golf joke at the end was the Topper to a reasonably good story...

What did I think... not much.

Was it a club full of wimpy cucks? Why hadn't Jerome fallen up a few sets of stairs yet?

Could have been much more, ended up being kinda lame.

I would have given you a 4 just for the jokes! I also REALLY like the way John is wound up by Ginger.

When Legio is quoting some mumbo jumbo to push this mess?? You know your story sucks.

Good story, even better joke.

Have never and will never understand the "getting wound up by third (or more) parties" thing. Just seems like a shitty way to behave.

No one to like I this tale,well, maybe Wil, seems like a level headed no nonsense type.

I enjoyed the opening scene and the closing joke. Unfortunately, the filler you had to add in the middle pulled your score down.

Not very entertaining...

Good to see a female character who has some sense and morals and integrity - but you're way out of step with the other authors around here.

(Are you sure that kind of character presentation is allowed on the Lit pages?...) Maybe other authors don't have that in their lives, so can't write about it - ? Very good theme and writing. Thank you...

Hilarious. Great stories. Excellent writing.

Thank you!

Hilarious indeed. I'd have stopped and given you 5* with pool boy story. Still 5*.

5* for the pool boy. 👌