All Comments on 'Girls Night, Or is it?'

Congratulations on posting your first story. It was a lot of fun and I look forward to seeing what you post next.

Who’s married in this story?

I hate unreliable narrator stories

does she have sex with her husband less than twice a month or not?

does Max exist or not? and who are they?

do her whorish friends exist or not?

Nice twist at the end!

5 stars. Cute, erotic, and put a smile on my face. Good writing.

Wrong category

Meh. The role play with her husband is lame.

Great story, please contribute more soon. Also, beware of the inevitable haters, and don't let them upset you. Also, I'll try to send a private message about a minor typo.

Always nice to see a new writer enter the fold. Very well done. I did get fooled when you introduced Jayce as someone she went out with awhile ago. But sexy. Keep 'em coming.

Like twist at the the end. Good story.

Thanks for the read.

Not too bad for your first story! Thought I was reading a Creamy White Thighs romance novel there for a minute. Hope that you write more

A familiar plot, but particularly well-done! 5/5!

Wait? What just happened here? Was this story actually about a Loving Wife showing love for her HUSBAND?! I am astonished! Flabbergasted! Astounded! Speechless! Perhaps even gobsmacked! Will wonders ever cease? And to think it could happen with the author's very first story. Well done. - TANSTAAFL

Average story, but welcome to the pages.

First off, Max is a dog … iguanas are not gonna be waiting for their owners.

Yeah, they are married. He mentioned taking her to her home, then later called it his as well. And she, near the end, says it pepped up their marriage.

ot sure how one (except Plastic Man) gets into the positions they get into in the front seat of a truck. Sweetie had not driven anywhere that evening, so there was no stranded car.

Generally, ‘adventurous’ in LW means ‘cheating’ but Sweetie (and the author) want to play the ‘GOTCHA’ game. It became obvious early on, however.

3*

Nice way to get your feet wet. Thanks for the effort.

Good story with a twist like it . But be careful on your other stories that you want to write. The loving wife category is a very very tricky category to write in so be careful on your stories. Cuckold/sharing/swinging cheating stories don’t mix with the loving wife category readers. They are not big fans of these stories. But BTB stories are huge favourites in this category. So please enjoy yourself on this site and remember there are other category’s on this site go have fun and show people you can keep up with the best on this site ok .

I'll give you credit even when i thought "ugh another cucking story" it wasn't too bad and I didnt see the end coming, though it has been done before. For the first time out of the gate it was better than most.

So all in all pretty good, if it had been what it looked like at first, you would have gotten a "well written" and then you'd be billed for cleaning the vomit out of my carpet.

Saw the twist right before you revealed it (I was trying to see how this was a LW sotory when it dawned on me.)

Great ending I had been hoping for as I read it. Consider writing more, perhaps in another category?

Love the fact they were husband and wife, terrific

JJ

It’s not much of a twist when you tell the reader you had a fling with the bartender but it didn’t last. See, there is no way to correct that. Not a bad story, but if you are going to try the old’ switcheroo, you need to pay attention to the details.

Story

WELL, YOU TRIED--DON'T GIVE UP. CD

a great few lines and it said a night full too.

This is exactly how I imagine an LW story. You did a great job! 5 * `!!!

"We got into his truck and my stomach had butterflies in it. I wanted him so bad. This was not an every week occurrence for me. I don't go after every guy that wants me or looks to get dick from every club. Of course it happens every once in a while but not on the regular." So does this excerpt mean that every once in a while she cheats on Jace and pulls some strange dick from the club?

Is it Jace or Jay? Oh who cares

A wife that wants her man - nice change

No sign of cheating from the wife. A nice change of story from the usual cheating wife/Girls night out stories. Thank you.

Nice story where girls' night out didn't lead to cheating only spicing up a marriage between husband and wife. Well done 5 stars.

Neatly done, but I knew long before you revealed it.

Well written, although wrong category. Not a Loving Wives story, more an Erotic Encounter one.