All Comments on 'Girls Night Out'

I can't imagine her husband being overjoyed with the events.

Here we go again, more 1 rst person nonsense. When, when, when are some of these so called authors going to get it through their thick heads, 1 rst person is for instruction booklets, not stories. 1 star.

Well written documentary. However, no conflict in this blow-by-blow report, so I can only give 3 stars. I personally prefer stories, and this is not a story..

Was this suppose to be a loving wife story or a bi-sexual adventurer?

You should concentrate on and FINISH one story at a time. Both stories you published today had no real endings and involved people doing some really stupid things. In this one she's going to get a divorce since her husbnad is going to take one look and smell of her and know she's cheated. Why would he risk his life with her? Bad

You woke feeling queasy from all the alcohol and called in sick to your work before 9:00 AM. You walked unsteadily downstairs to get coffee and saw the note from your husband. It was short and curt, "I took the kids to school. You didn't get in until 2:00 AM and looked like a wreck. You had better have a good explanation."

You felt even unsteadier as you sat at the kitchen table. You flashed on the images, hot, big cocks banging you on the dance floor, so very hot. You felt a warm wetness between your legs as your body relived the pounding bareback sex you had enjoyed. Then you looked at your husband's note again. "Shit," you thought, "What am I going to say to him?"

By 10:30, your phone was blowing up with messages from friends who had seen or been sent pictures of your night of debauchery. You began to worry about your husband seeing the pictures; how bad were they, you wondered.

At 10:34 AM, you got your answer, a text from your husband, "No need to explain, whore. I've seen the videos. We are over." Then another text from him at 10:35, "P.S. Better get tested for STDs and pregnancy. That's a lot of cum running down your legs and I had a vasectomy 6 months ago."

"Oh my God," you thought. "What have I done."

What a slut, first time out with friends and she betrays her husband. Divorce the bitch

2nd person = unreadable.

Would love to see a part two to this, about the fallout of the sex at the club.

Why did you write all this from a Third Person, Point of View (POV)? It simply doesn't work. You cannot describe what a person is feeling and thinking from the POV of an observer? Which is what a 3rd person POV actually is.

Plus, how could a 3rd person POV actually exist if the person is alone? There is no one to observe!

What's the significance of her being a married whore? It added nothing to the story.

Is cheating if it's with a man or a woman. I as her husband would have been pissed.

Overly cliched title (79, just on this site) and 2nd person. One of the easiest ratings of 1.

Writing in the present tense is almost always a mistake. Especially in the first person.

Why do so many authors stop their stories in the middle of a possible better story. I mean, after all, is that really where you wanted this to stop?

Second person sucks! I never go out with girlfriends, my wife would kill me!

A total waste, not even worth to read it. Very much disliked.

Nothing about this story makes for an entertaining read. Married? Thinks her husband will love a conversation replay? No indication sh and her girlfriend actions mean what? As I bounce from one recommended story to another it is my fault I am disappointed. Each one has less direction and more dribbling out nonsense to no end. Please stick to reading and not writing...

Damn, OP, are you trying to single-handedly revive the bad habit of second-person writing? This was a thing back in the 90s, but it's an awful style that alienates the reader. I mean, who cares what some lothario is writing to some chick? Is this a guy who refers to himself in the third person and names his private parts after himself prefaced by the adjective, "little?" Probably drives a Trans-Am with speed-taped T-top panels and primer grey junkyard fenders. Try reviving payphones or hot rollers, both of which have an actual purpose in the universe.

As if !

Chadwroteanothercuckstory in 2nd person.

second person POV really sucks. Try it again with a different POV.

NO READ NO SCORE

CRAP

Honestly I really liked it. Not for the poor schmuck husband of the wife in question, but rather for the story itself, and the erotica of it. After all isn't that what this site was founded on. Or maybe this story should have been put in the non consent forum? Especially since that's where all the good stories have migrated to. Thanks for sharing it.

What's with the second person narrative? Horrible. The story wasn't any better either of course. Pretty lame, seems to be typical with this writer...

Once again you have proven 2nd person just don't work well with a short story.

Second-person only works in situations that call for it such as, "Jill you were so drunk last night that you turned into a skank! You let this creepy guy expose your bra, and later you banged him!" It does not work in the place of first person or omniscient.

Shit another slut story