by DoubleDimpleDoll
This was veryyy good! I'm so glad I found this. On Christmas day no less, which is kinda sad but who cares. Thanks. Lol, i had fun.
Brother Sister stories are my weakness. Love this one. Would love to here a Valentine’s Day story with these two. Maybe with a secret to hide from their parents.
The "little girl" voice was kindof immersion breaking, she's supposed to be at least 18. What 18 year old talks like that?
Anyway, the story itself was pretty good.
@ Ravus_Sapiens
I take it you will submitting one of your own audio's to this site soon, thus showing every other performer what they should be doing and just how perfect you are. Constructive criticism is one thing, but try having the balls to create something yourself first, before pontificating like a prat.
From an admirer of anybody who tries their hand at creating and submitting their work to public scrutiny. Bless you all!
Fantastic story!
As for the comment on the voice, even my ex-partner would put a girlish voice when he wanted to ask me for something, so it doesn't break any immersion, at least for me.
It is evident in this case that the sister is the favorite and is a bit spoiled in that sense, but oh, we love her so much that we forgive everything, right people? Who's with me?