All Comments on 'Good Morning BlowJob'

Decent first story, some of the writing needs to be expanded upon but had me wanting more by the end.

You start out in the third person, then change to second person. I found it very awkward. Most narration is third person, some manages to work in first person, almost none works well in second person. It’s as if the author/ narrator is telling you the reader how to feel. I strongly recommend you stick with third person for future stories