All Comments on 'Good Vibrations Day 06-07'

Heather is getting naughtier !

Loved it.

Anna xx

Reading this is tiresome, because every sentence sounds just like the ones surrounding it--simple, declarative sentences in repetition take on the quality of a dripping faucet. Plus, there is no dialogue, no drama, no life.

You and the readers below are all so fucking gay.

Please don't come to LW from other cats. Few LW readers will go back and read the older chapters.

A whore is awakened.

Domestic abuse and jail time!

Sick mind! Very non- fictional and overbearing.

Please get an editor.

"Maybe if her and Heather continued the track, they are on them she will get to see Heather take it at some point."

That's not a coherent sentence. I think it's supposed to be "continued the track they are on, then she...", but it still needs work. You've got the passion and the ideas, but it's worth the time to work on the technical side. Good luck and keep writing! -Peace and Love