All Comments on 'Gotta Pay the Piper Ch. 25'

This story keeps getting better and better. Keep going.

Wish i knew why i love this story so much.

Don't know why, but I enjoy this story as I did with the Slave Camp series. Keep going and developing the world you successfully created.

I am surprised that Beth didn't spend a night or three over at the Hacienda en route to Lucy's ?

Keep going.

I just came across your stories about slavery and you asked a theoretical question about, what if Judicial slavery existed???

It already does exist in the US. You might want to check out the 13th amendment regarding the exception for prisoners.

Ugh, pronouns — “greeted me cheerfully” “said sternly” “he offered cheerfully.” The hallmark of a lazy, uninspired pseudo writer. Don’t tell me the protagonist was greeted cheerfully; use verbs, goddamn it. Show me that cheerfulness.

Back to the drawing board, son. Perhaps you should spend less time leaving snarky reviews about others’ stories and more time working on your craft. If you’re going to criticize others’ writing, then your work had better be airtight – not the hackneyed drivel you’re churning out “cheerfully.”

I do love this story and all the characters. Fun entertainment. Cheer

Finally caught up after not touching this series for several months. It's been a good continuation. I feel like even if she wasn't sold across the country as a morale tool, Beth should have been deliberately put through some kind of traumatic punishment like what happened with Angie's week at the shop. She got off too lightly for what she tried to do. Or maybe that's just me.