All Comments on 'Graduation Summer Ch. 05'

time wise. Really appreciate not having to go back and skim the prior chapter to remember what was happening.

Cute story of young love, thanks so much for this oasis of sweetness in the desert of depravity that characterizes so much of the rest of LitE.

On a practical note, the best way I've found to self edit is to read your story out loud. It helps you catch "wrong" words that spell check won't as well as awkward phrasings.

Couple examples, nitpicky I know, but the difference between good and really good:

"... and safe it as a souvenir."

"My dad's sister, husband, and son, Ken." Your dad has a husband?

You're a good storyteller, and it wouldn't take much to rise to another level.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Bill and Rita's relationship continues to build--and so does the story.

The two of them are driven by their hormones to do what males and females traditionally do. Still enjoying this story.